Open Poetry #31 |
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Rain's Rhythmic Melody |
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Blush Member
since 2002-08-31
Posts 56Ky |
A split rail fence darken from the penetrating of the lingering rain A train whistles far off in the distant Fog intensifies the night~ The rippling stream, so rhythmic, enhanced by the mystic quiteness in the air~ Is interrupted by the roll of thunder As the storm progresses near the end~ The flickering of lightening illuminates fields only to display the silhouette of a farmhouse and barn~ The curtains move ever so slightly As the beads of water on the tattered screen dissipate into nowhere~ Scattered branches still rustling Whisper As the power of nature remains in command~ And the tranquility of the night returns once again~ ( My first attempt at free verse hope you all like it) |
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muted![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i think its very nice ![]() |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Blush Well done enjoyed the read. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Blush, it felt like if I was in that storm myself. I love it, you did well on your first free verse indeed. But when the lines are so different in length, they sometimes read easier when they're not centered (my humble opinion) ![]() A split rail fence darken from the penetrating of the lingering rain A train whistles far off in the distant Fog intensifies the night~ The rippling stream, so rhythmic, enhanced by the mystic quiteness in the air~ Is interrupted by the roll of thunder As the storm progresses near the end~ The flickering of lightening illuminates fields only to display the silhouette of a farmhouse and barn~ The curtains move ever so slightly As the beads of water on the tattered screen dissipate into nowhere~ Scattered branches still rustling Whisper As the power of nature remains in command~ And the tranquility of the night returns once again~ Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi, Your words are very eloquent. Nice flow, too. Sandra |
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