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Roller Skating In Deep Sand
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Roller Skating In Deep Sand |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Thought I'd use some cliches & some new lines with a different sounding hook I know it's time to play my hand, Cause I'd love to be your man. You're the Venus of my dreams like a romance novel queen. I see your beauty every way in the sunshine or the rain. You're on my mind day and night You're my renaissance for life Chorus: But I can't say the things I feel my tongue is tied my lips stay sealed Gettin nowhere's where I am like roller skating in deep sand. How I'd love to stroke your skin an excite your easy grin like a gamble brings a rush I'd like to win your gentle touch Like new frosting soft and hot You're sweet topping on my thoughts Like a flower in the breeze My heart is swayin round in me Chorus: Oh I'd like to say the things I feel but my tongue is tied my lips stay sealed. Gettin nowhere's where I am like roller skating in deep sand. Outro: Can't get my tongue to move I wish I could have you by my side my lips are sealed can't get through I wish you could undersatnd....... It's like trying to skate in deep sand Ain't doin nothin at all |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am, apparently, "into" irony.  and yes, this fits: "You're my renaissance for life" That I could live with.  Lovely. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ethome Enjoyed the lyrics how about the music? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, enjoyed the imagery of hot frosting, not to mention the futility of skating in deep sand. Sounds a little like my life. Touched another chord here, ET. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Very nice quality dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Would love to hear this with the music.. Excellent write.  Hugs~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how creative! I love this Eric! Put it to the music and send it to her! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric Puts me in mind of a few dreams I've had where I'm trying to get someplace but can't move. Enjoyed the lyrical quality of your poetry, as always! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like this one, it's different. It has a little bit of a twist to it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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