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Martie
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0 posted 2004-03-20 10:26 PM


The Glass of Air that Separates

In the room I roamed
with ear pressed against
the glass of air that separated
my table from theirs.

Lost to my companion,
consumed by a conversation
from behind,
words with no faces.

A toast to beginnings and endings,
what do you say? I heard.
Out with the old,
in with the new.
To beginnings and endings,
and to truth, no matter what.

I looked up to the clear eyed watch
of my companion,
who understood the nature of my listening.

A toast, I thought,
a brown table, a glass,
the napkin with a wet circle.
How many things are permanent?
The circle,
a symbol of continuity and continuation,
yet, this circle will be gone soon,
dried up and thrown away,
carted off and dumped into a landfill
and forever changed.
Are we in life, like the napkin,
imprinted, used and thrown away?

He touched the circle on my finger,
the symbol of our love,
he touched it with his own.

Uncertain of direction
I listened still.
I toast to truth
and just straight lines, I heard.

I looked down at our hands
now interlocked
warm on warm
and raised my glass.

To circles, I said.

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a poem written from a scene in a piece of fiction I am writing.

[This message has been edited by Martie (03-22-2004 12:12 PM).]

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1 posted 2004-03-20 10:35 PM


Martie -- this was lovely and I sense holding much hope! ........ .........jo
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2 posted 2004-03-20 10:39 PM



Ahh...indeed.  Circles.
Everything is coming to me in such a
timely way...it does not surprise me,
nor should it,
that you would be one of them to bring me
even more proof.

To circles!

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3 posted 2004-03-21 12:27 PM


very moving
...now wanting to read the "piece of fiction" you are writing!

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4 posted 2004-03-21 08:46 AM



Martie...

I don't have the words... but you know...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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5 posted 2004-03-21 08:49 AM


Martie
Excellent and this is not fiction.

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6 posted 2004-03-21 09:46 AM


one of my favorites...

you know this.



You are so lovely Martie...

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7 posted 2004-03-21 10:21 AM


Martie,
   I was stunned when I read this from you, but taken but it at the same time.  
    A toast, I thought,
a brown table, a glass,
the napkin with a wet circle.
How many things are permanent?
The circle,
a symbol of continuity and continuation,
yet, this circle will be gone soon,
dried up and thrown away,
carted off and dumped into a landfill
and forever changed.
Are we in life, like the napkin,
imprinted, used and thrown away?

Then, you did it.  You resolved this with a happy ending.  At that that, I thought, "Yep, that's Martie!"   I enjoyed this very much, and would also like to read the piece of fiction!
              Sadie

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8 posted 2004-03-21 11:00 AM


A beautifully written poignant piece, Martie. Very well done. I'm sure I've told you before that I envy your mind? I do, I do.
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9 posted 2004-03-21 12:16 PM


WOW!!  Here's to circles...no beginning and no end.
~Hugs sweet lady~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

         ~  Kahlil Gibran

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10 posted 2004-03-21 12:32 PM


MartieSis~

Your heart touches mine repeatedly ...~
ALWAYS the circle of friendship returns me to where I want to be~

Beautiful piece dearest poetess~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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11 posted 2004-03-21 01:33 PM


what a wonderful poem Martie - a soft but perceptive look into some of the ponderings of life and love - loved it - Paul
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12 posted 2004-03-21 02:29 PM


Wow...!!

Eric

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13 posted 2004-03-21 03:05 PM


I think we would be somewhat surprised at what the circle encompasses but until then, here's to your poetry and fiction writing.  Good luck!
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14 posted 2004-03-21 03:10 PM


I think the fiction you are writing will be truly special to judge from this scene, so masterfully written.
Love, Margherita

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15 posted 2004-03-21 03:11 PM


Call it poetry, call it fiction, whatever you like, I like what this says, and how it is written....
_______ice
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16 posted 2004-03-21 05:00 PM


To circles indeed.... smiling at you Martie.
This is indeed masterfully written.

M

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

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17 posted 2004-03-22 10:42 AM


Beautiful title... opening the door to an incredible write! *S* And knowing your talent, the whole will be every bit as incredible as this scene. *S*
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18 posted 2004-03-22 12:00 PM


...by and by Lord
by and by...

Excellent!


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19 posted 2004-03-23 05:56 PM


"a poem written from a scene in a piece of fiction I am writing."

Yes, perhaps....but there is much more than fiction in this. Much, much more. I'm glad I looked back in here, in time to find this beauty.

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20 posted 2004-03-24 01:55 PM


"To circles" Nicely said.
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21 posted 2004-03-24 10:03 PM


Funny, this doesn't quite read like fiction.

Lovely!

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22 posted 2004-03-24 10:22 PM


Thank you good people for your wonderful replies.  And, I admit...not totally fiction...the fiction that I write comes from my heart, and things I've experienced...therefore from truth.  Also, I am a listener at restaurants......I tell my husband that I'm gathering information for my book.  
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