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And when you paint me...
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And when you paint me... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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And when you paint me ...do not ever treat me as Picasso did for I will never be a straight line intersecting with curved lines, and, no, never will I be a line for life-long misery. Should I apologize for a true artists' art…? No But I would have not imparted once! a "thank you, that's fine" to such an unruly line of distortion when distortion of grief is enough to render a wretched cry with no ever need to ask "why?" God, I do not think for once or ever more that is how I would leave a door unspoken but if you were to paint me please be kind and paint my mind one that never heeds me. Because from you who saw the light in me ~*~ Now? I wish you were there… I have seen marvelous sights winsome balloons gone on to heights a child come into my care I've gone beyond where you've not dared I have seen some marvelous thrills and have planted some wondrous hills I have seen a rainbow's flight and I have gone into the night You would not be proud of me for I have not become history but what I will do for you and me has become a bit of memory…. Though only in your soul, you see…… when you paint me. ~*~ Repost, slightly rewritten... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Should I apologize for a true artists' art…? No NO apology necessary, you are your own masterpiece very interesting write, metaphorically on target |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
quote: Not all have the eyes nor the courage to see such things... if you do it's no wonder others were left behind. I love the way this flows so gently. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you're much too young to have "made history"...you've got lots of time. We'll talk about it at your first book signing. You be sure to let us know when.  Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes as JM says..we'll talk about it at your first book signing.  Wonderful write Karilea.. Thank for gifting us with such beautiful words. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound ...or a smiling mouth. ~ Kahlil Gibran [This message has been edited by Enchantress (03-19-2004 09:29 AM).] |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I couldn't agree more, Sunshine. Your essence could not be depicted by his style. Wonderful thinking and writing. Sadie psst...thank you for your warm words sent during during my illness. I feel a connection, too. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
What do I think? - besides awesome...very strong and resilient and whole. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine You have shed the light upon my day.  |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Sunshine, ...clever, original and a most entertaining poetic story, indeed. Enjoyed! "You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark." |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Karilea Like a painting, this poem exposes far more than the surface structure of its lines. Yet it is firm and honest in its message...I love how it descends down the page, with lines well spaced, and proper length, falling through feelings, finally coming around full circle to remind the reader of the root of its theme....Well done... enjoyed _________ice ><> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"for I will never be a straight line intersecting with curved lines, and, no, never will I be a line for life-long misery." true to your nom-de-plume, you shall be a stroke of soft warm sunshine across the stark white canvas, gently blended curve of life's highlights trailing off the edge of the picture into the blue horizon some day, not today though, since there are still many more windows to clean  |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Well-done, Karilea. Your nom de plume reflects your influence well. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
God, I do not think for once or ever more that is how I would leave a door unspoken ~ This is simple stunning.... and a beautiful canvas indeed you have painted ( I emailed you, I had a question for ya) hugssss lovely artist Lauren~ ~~**~~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh, you could make picasso blush with this.. your beauty of phrase spills over unto all of us here...thank you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful, no matter what colors are used |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
Pallette calling such would ne'er squeeze absolutes HuesTingedNotMixed Rose whose CrimsonRedRubyGarnetSwells Blooming Always from the mind "Which lieth between Spirit and Soul" Our Earthly I's Home Merci and Merci TOTH "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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