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Thesauric Tendencies
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thesauric Tendencies These words will fail me, for how could words alone speak of this illicit longing? Pen stroke caresses on pages in blinding absence of fingers begging to trace your braille confessions. Can parchment hold this much definitive ache curling the edges? If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries. My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged for body language in intimate explanation. Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme, redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms. Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts, leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust. If words but could, they would never be enough. Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse plagiarized you in chains of museless curse, idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce. As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice. Seduction's spell in syllabic diction, if words but could they would shed this shell of fiction. Might I find the words that will not fail me |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries. My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged for body language in intimate explanation." Ahhh, think you could hook us up with an audio of this one JM? For those lonely ol' nights...  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You little devil you....Snuck one in late at night. I just can't believe how beautifully clever this is. You've come a long long way my poet pet. The words choices in this are excellent and the poetic metaphoric reference from imagination to image are superb... "as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries" and oh, I love this bit! "Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme, redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms. Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts, leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust" Man, that makes the title come alive..... You da poet baby write write on on! Love to ya kid! Eric Remember this... Grab your pen from the stars call your muse from afar steal some time where you are and write poetry. Write sweet sounds like the breeze and you'll laugh while you're free long or short verses please write some poetry. At your desk on the net with your keys ready set sing the songs you like best while you're blessed by the best you can be. From your quill from your heart write the words that you are turn hatred to trust break your arm if you must share your tears only just write some poetry. You'll grow till you bloom like a harvest full moon shining truth in a room and I can tell that you're well writing poetry. You got taste you got spunk you got words for everyone. In a dream or in truth full of love or just blue any way that you choose write some poetry. © Eric True |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"If words but could, they would never be enough." i chose that line because i cant compliment this poem enough...you have amazed me, and touched me...  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries." damn, but you are good, lady can I sit near you for a while and absorb some of your poetic talent? of course, this goes into my library to inhale |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
JM, this is incredible artistry! I'm in awe. I like this: "Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse plagiarized you in chains of museless curse, idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce." ~K~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Gee, Janet, I'm too novice to even lend a response to this beauty so I'll take liberty to borrow some of yours... These words will fail me, for how could words alone speak |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The heartbreak begins right here: "These words will fail me," and then you start that "hurts so good" tenderness and it's so personal--sometimes I read you and it's like hearing my cellmate whisper prayers in the night as we both weep. And this right here so defines that intimacy, as it aptly displays your willingness to allow us a peek into your own journaling. "Pen stroke caresses on pages in blinding absence of fingers begging to trace your braille confessions." wow.  and then ladies and gents? She makes love to us all: "If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries. My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged for body language in intimate explanation." M'lady Jan? The frustration, even through devotion, is all lit up plainly for us in the italicized emphasis: "If words but could, they would never be enough." "As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice." To your ending prayer: "Might I find the words that will not fail me" Mind if I wing around YOUR flame awhile? Total devastating beauty Jan. The moth becomes the flame. thank you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
if words but could they would The Queen Moth flies... and lights candle sticks...  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I will be back! just wanted to let you know I was here  ~~**~~ Walking with bare feet among a tapestry of words, each woven thread, awakening the soul ~~**~~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-19-2004 09:14 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse plagiarized you in chains of museless curse, idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce. As if such carnal explicitness could be done justice. Seduction's spell in syllabic diction, if words but could they would shed this shell of fiction. Might I find the words that will not fail me" Janet Marie...words fail me now... as always you leave me speechless with your writing. If only you would post more often...pleeease. Excellent write. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You have the mind of an artist And the soul of a saint And the read of your words Have brought me to faint. I very rarely save poems, but this I will save. WWRS   |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie I think your muse has been saving up for this glorious birthing. It's wonderful wording leaves me in awe of your talent and your passionate heart. |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Bravo! Very well done and most entertaining to read. This was my favorite part... If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries. My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged for body language in intimate explanation. I absolutely loved that segment. "You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark." |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Janet M enjoyed muchly...excelent language... ______ice ><> |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Duncan ... me thinks me mothy missouri twang might kill the mood ... maybe I can find a blonde to read it for you.  Eric ... my poet pal, you are so good to me...thank you so much for your generosity and encouragement..and for the repost of a lovely gift...I still have that printed out from before. You da man Dawn...what a wonderful response...your words "but" did. thank you so very much.Kacy...I'll make ya a deal....I'll come sit by you and we'll watch those northern lights thank you for this sweet reply and I am honored to be in your library. thanks girlie. Kahlil ... thank you for such a gracious reply... I am so pleased you stopped by. ~~~~~ thank you guys..very much. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sadelite ... your response was just perfect... thank you very much for reading me. KA ... me twin ya read me inside out and in between ... thank you seems too little to say for such a heartfelt generous offering....your reply reads like poetry. *sigh* nothing like being well inspired. Its the living with out it thats the real test. (ykikyk) thank you baby-girl...love you. Kari... me thinks I singed meself on this one.. *L* burned those candles a both ends thank you  ~~~~~ thank you all!!! Home is a feeling I buried in you ... I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ... M.E. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lauren... I look forward to your flutterbye Nancy... thank you so much for your kind words...seems my muse got spring fever...funny how it works..for months nothing and now she wont shut up. *L* thank you for your support. Sy-babes... *smile* ... you and Randy feeling faint? got the vapors?? lol thank you my dearheart...I am honored to be "kept by you"  Martie... isnt that the truth...long pregnancy and long labors...lol but if feels liberating to be writing again... thank you so much sweets... ~~~ thank you~~~ Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Opeth... thank you ..that was one of my faves too...thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts. Ice ... thank you too for coming by and for the excellent. I appreciate the read. ~~~~~~~~ thank you to everyone on this thread for these delightful replies...youre so good for me mothymuse. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Knowing I would be rhapsodized in your rhyme, redefined in the heat of your articulate rhythms. Breathless pronunciations decipher graffiti thrusts, leaving indelible stains on manuscripts of lust. You and your muse are breathtaking, your talent is unsurpassed Janet Marie. I forgot how much I missed the rainbow of ribbons wrapped around your poetry. This is a many splendored thing, and a very special gift. Thank you for writing the way you do. Keep it up would you!! |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Wow JM, all those times I thought your muse was off hiding she must have been studying  Word choice was superb, the inferences clear and it all flows smoothly. Amazing poem m'dear. All I can say is I stand in awe... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Lori ... thank you so much girlie, for such a lovely reply on this and on the duet Lauren and I did...both comments are gracious and kind...just like you. Steve... I bought the muse a thesaurus and she took off? who knew? thank you groovy guy for your kind words and for stopping by. thank you both...you humble me with such supportive replies. I've posted so little in the last year that I feel like a newbie, I get so nervous, moth stage fright. thanks guys. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm smiling... These words certainly haven't failed you, m'friend - Nicely penned...  |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Still, I have memorized you chapter and verse plagiarized you in chains of museless curse, idolized you on metaphorical knees of coerce." What a treat JM! First a beautiful collaboration with Lauren, and then I find this treasure to read this morning. Feels like old times - sooooo wonderful to read you. This was stunning Janet Marie. The vocabulary and metaphorical twists were a sheer delight. Can a poem tickle the mind gator-gal? 'Cause this one just did. Absolutely wonderful! Best wishes and big hugs for a great morning read, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Nan ... A smile and well done from someone who writes as well as you means much to me..thank you kindly, kind lady, for reading Kitgatorgirlie me thinks I was trying to tickle something!! LOLthank you dear one...for your constant support and encouragement of my work. I always smile when I see your name. thank you both and to all who shared their thoughts with me. It had been over 8 months since I'd posted anything...feels good to be writing again. We'll see how long the muse sticks around...I've found shes best left to come and go as needed. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is exceptional JM, I know I'm going to love your words before I read them. And like Nan said.."these words havent failed you" I don't believe they ever have. going into my library this is. M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Maree...thank you girlie for such a sweet and supportive reply...Im always happy to see your name. thank you again to all who came by and shared some of you with me. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ... M.E. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wow! What a roller coaster ride that was and this.... If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, as I script your name in cursive filigree on my skin, inhaling you before the ink dries. My lips recite you, vocabulary exchanged for body language in intimate explanation. I had to get my fan out, hope you didn't burn your widdle wings writing those lines. I am late as usual these days, but I have to tell you that to finally make it here and find YOU here, twice is about as good as it is ever going to get. Hope you are well m'friend, and thank you for your midnight flutter, this was metaphorically maticulous! (Hmmm, and what else would it be?) Today I'm only moving clouds, tomorrow I'll try mountains. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sharon.... well, you know Im smiling at your alliterate reply...lol....and sometimes we just must singe the wings....( a moths gotta do what a ....) yaya  but I'm also learning when to say when... you know us moths...learn it all the hard way, heart on sleeve...but thats life. I'm always grateful for the inspiration... Thank you for this delightful reply girlie.... youre not late...right on time. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your muse may take prolonged vacations of epic proportions... but oh, gal... does it ever guide your pen to glory when it visits you! *G* Word did not fail you... they gifted us. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ruthie-girl... "Epic"...you aint neva lied... lol The funny thing is... I always feel inspired...but somewhere from the head and heart--to the pen...the words were getting lost in the translation... ME was getting in the way..lol Thank you lady, for your kind words...hopefully mine will stick around for awhile...but if not...I'm ok with that too...Ive learned not everything needs to be turned into a moth confession. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Your words have never failed to reach out Janet. Great to be able to read you again! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Eddie...thank you muchly poet sir....so nice to see your name in the bluepages again. thanks for coming by and the kind words groovy guy. Thanks again to all who replied.... these were some of the best responses I've had, I appreciate it muchly. jm |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
If words but could, they would burn slow down margins seasoned with your scent, Always giving me goosebumps! so good to read you again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
gemma girlie... thank you so much...that you took the time to seek out one of mine on your return means so much to me... truly. thanks groovy gal...your classy presence has been missed round here. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible writing! I'm in awe here |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
These words will fail me'' its not often that words fail me, however, at this time I am speechless and in such awe of you....but you know.... how I understand each ache of this and each splendor.... ~~**~~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You need only your pen, and the magic is there. This is a rare gem of expression. And I, too, have no words to tell of my delight in reading this. You are amazing Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dixie ... thank you so much for your gracious reply. Lauren ... yes...I know you know my girlie nothing like a poet to inspire another poet. *wink* Thank you so much sweets. Liz ... Hey there lovely lady .... thank you so much ... its so great to see your name here, your presence and rhymes divine are missed. Hope all is well with you. thanks to all for these wonderful replies. Home is a feeling I buried in you ... I'm alright, I'm alright ... It only hurts when I breathe ... M.E. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Dear friend, You know that I could not return without finding you, don't you? "Seduction's spell in syllabic diction, if words but could they would shed this shell of fiction." Absolutely breathtaking. I have missed you terribly! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Terry...thanks so much. I truly appreciate that you took the time to come in and find a post of mine... so great to have you back in the blue pages, welcome home groovy guy. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: Words are unfortunately not enough for me either to comment on this one. Would be wonderful to hear this one read, hint, hint! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hunted this down as I remembered something Karen had written in her comment... M'lady Jan? The frustration, even through devotion, is all lit up plainly for us in the italicized emphasis: Seems the more things change Jan, the more they often stay the same. You dear lady are absent but never forgotten! |
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