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Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2004-03-18 07:04 AM

needlingly still:
      the rush of silent noises
      like screams from the
voiceless

we know
      why blood flows:
            the heart pumps
            selflessly
      to the rhythm of
      the drums of
life

jagged
      the way we walk
      through cobbled streets
first claiming love and then
denying

fruitless becomes existence
then

when
the stillness of the howling night
      rules roost
      like the bobbing head of a cock
      standing on top of the roof
      of a broken house
      after having survived
      an earthquake
bawling the swagger
needlessly

though
      like an afterthought
      in continuation
of the flow

~

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (03-18-2004 09:53 AM).]

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

1 posted 2004-03-18 07:59 AM

Upon reading this I thought, original and very interesting.

"You sleep in the night yet the night and the silent water still so dark."

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

2 posted 2004-03-18 09:52 AM

Thanks for your reponse and appreciation, Opeth.

Regards
Sudhir

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

3 posted 2004-03-18 10:38 AM

this speaks to me in ways i cant explain, something is there..deep within..and its finding me reading this again and again

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2004-03-18 10:55 AM

'we know why blood flows' that line, that is fantastic.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-03-18 11:27 AM

Wow! Very profound write Sudhir!
Your use of imagery is excellent.
Very much enjoyed m'friend.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

~ Kahlil Gibran

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

6 posted 2004-03-18 11:34 AM

First Class - liked it

Dave

Martie

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7 posted 2004-03-18 11:57 AM

Sudhir

"like the bobbing head of a cock
      standing on top of the roof
      of a broken house
      after having survived
      an earthquake
bawling the swagger
needlessly"

The above part really hit me...the entire poem is excellent!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2004-03-18 12:13 PM

very nicely done my friend.. very nice indeed!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-03-18 12:46 PM

another classic beauty you do so well...

I love the format here

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2004-03-18 01:50 PM

Yet another wonderful write my smilin' friend. Enjoyed! Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

11 posted 2004-03-18 01:56 PM

Sudhir,

I enjoyed the depth of this.

sadie

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

12 posted 2004-03-22 05:30 AM

Thank you very much, my dear friends...

Regards
Sudhir

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