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Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2004-03-15 06:32 PM

I have no opinion
what determines poetry
but knowing
it should not be anger...
I quiet,
lest this raving gape
like axed foul
should flail
the betrayed and blood soaked words
denied on chopper’s block
there upon the page
and find still
no care
for it’s pain.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2004-03-15 06:37 PM

You may feel it best Duncan to be quiet while feeling angry..
I prefer to write it out.
I've missed you.
Hugs~

Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound
...or a smiling mouth.

~ Kahlil Gibran

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2004-03-15 06:43 PM

I feel it takes all kinds of emotion to write true poetry....not every thing in life is a bed of roses...how is it you always see the truth in things?....I need that vision....felt here-- in understanding.....

~~**~~
Walking with bare feet
among a tapestry of words,
each woven thread, awakening the soul
~~**~~

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-03-15 06:47 PM

There. You did it again.
Sometimes, I like
having my words fly from me...

to just stand

quiet.

And humbled.

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

4 posted 2004-03-15 06:48 PM

sometimes the feelings are too strong,sometimes words simply fail to convey the depth of rage ...but...im glad you wrote this...becase i enjoyed reading it

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

5 posted 2004-03-15 07:49 PM

Expressing yourself very well!

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2004-03-15 07:53 PM

You did good...strength in your quietness

*s
M

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2004-03-15 07:53 PM

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2004-03-15 08:08 PM

I wait.

(but?)

I whine...

purdy please?

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2004-03-15 08:24 PM

Duncan...I hear you!

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2004-03-15 08:41 PM

what determines poetry
but knowing
it should not be anger...
==========================

Amen ... Amen ...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2004-03-15 08:43 PM

forgot to put in library...

( the "editor" should like this one...
its nice and short.)

I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons,
and the sacred simplicity of you at my side.

Vienna Teng

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

12 posted 2004-03-15 08:47 PM

I quiet, in awe and smiling at such beauty. Yes...I quiet with you

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2004-03-15 09:13 PM

Wanna whine on the porch for a while?
It's OK by me, but you already knew that.
Just leave my slippers alone.

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

14 posted 2004-03-16 12:38 PM

you quiet - i loud

no care - no cure

you rocks - i leaves

C

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

15 posted 2004-03-16 01:10 AM

you know usually this isn't a form of poetry that I enjoy, it just always seems choppy to me, but this is the exception. The way you wrote it brings out the emotion behind it very vividly, wonderfully done.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

16 posted 2004-03-17 11:35 PM

Hey ya goob, I wasn't kidding,
that's big of you, and not always easy to do.

A wonderful message here, and so very well expressed.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

17 posted 2004-03-18 10:06 PM

Quietly said...But with surety of one that knows the benefit of constraint.

I happen to like this one a lot.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

18 posted 2004-03-18 10:19 PM

Thanks ya'll, your time and replies are much appreciated.
Unfortunately the constraint you mention Ed, came publicly only after shooting my mouth off privately, so any kudos for my behavior is grossly misplaced.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

19 posted 2004-03-19 04:39 AM

oh... anger is good for the soul

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