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Deep Kiss - I've just cut the wrong words - I didn't write this bit
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Deep Kiss - I've just cut the wrong words - I didn't write this bit |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I've just cut the wrong words sorry I didn't write the bit I published I wrote this You kissed me on my knees Yet stood above me And like love My love was above me You sheltered me that night Your hair was wet with rain Your eyes were dark and piercing I will never love again Your tongue was harsh and demanding The lights shone through the vest You placed over my head I knew I was second best The cold you broke within me The frost in the evening night I have met many women But never the warmth of fright You are so a women That passes fear into a man Because the man fears He fails and that he knows But with tenderness he can Endear you to his soul And give you your sweet love And in those eyes together There is no heaven above A strong women loves And unfortunately it's true Too strong a love, but right Is not for both of you But in a lighted corner Two people miles away Look into each other And never their minds do stray |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
excellent...the language is a bit skewed at the end from your usual articulate perfection, but still effective joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Yes you are right. My problem was I originally wrote it as an answer to someone else's words and then cut the wrong words to publish it today, I will put my glasses on next time. I then didn't edit these words in my desire to say I screwed up and have managed to achieve negatives on both. dave |
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