Open Poetry #31 |
just an ugly girl, you know me well |
mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
pull me out of this drum. i dont want to die. the dentist was gentle, but i still had to cry. the day takes off running i skinned my knee. music and science will crucify me. i send you my love, another one lost. just drag me behind you i'll survive on exhaust. i'm still fighting things on lonely bones. i can outmanuever sticks and stones. asking attention from those who are blind. turning away from the sincerest mind. tread shamefully on hollow ground. pictures make life more profound. i fall so short of expectation yet still the apex of god's creation. i carry fragility like a well-weathered friend. step on me i won't break again. for those of you in this same place you are the most beautiful disgrace. perfectly crafted painted by number but eden never did outlast the summer. the people i know will remember me thus: an ugly girl who understood us. joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is marvelous. I loved all of it, but this got my attention: "the day takes off running i skinned my knee. music and science will crucify me." And this just hammered it home: "i fall so short of expectation yet still the apex of god's creation. i carry fragility like a well-weathered friend. step on me i won't break again." Smile. Lady, if you're in my head I'm not responsible for any injuries incurred while you're there. I enjoyed this much, thank you. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
loved this honest peeling back of the outer layer of the apple, revealing the beauty within |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"perfectly crafted painted by number but eden never did outlast the summer." That image really tickled me! Thanks. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
beautifully smashing... love it! Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So much honesty in this well done piece of you! |
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nn Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 75 |
Fantastic! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"just drag me behind you i'll survive on exhaust." So much in this... Every line.. I am in awe. "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
i fall so short of expectation yet still the apex of god's creation I like this. You boldly face daily obstacles with a great outlook. ...Melton |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
Wishes wow ... this is true poetry ,your beautiful i say , not a drop of ugly James |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"i carry fragility like a well-weathered friend" what a cool line...sweet |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
deeply felt and powerfully stated and full of important meaning. You write this so very well - Paul |
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