just an ugly girl, you know me well

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mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

0 posted 2004-03-04 04:08 PM

pull me out of this drum.
i dont want to die.
the dentist was gentle,
but i still had to cry.
the day takes off running
i skinned my knee.
music and science
will crucify me.
i send you my love,
another one lost.
just drag me behind you
i'll survive on exhaust.
i'm still fighting things
on lonely bones.
i can outmanuever
sticks and stones.
asking attention
from those who are blind.
turning away from
the sincerest mind.
tread shamefully on
hollow ground.
pictures make life
more profound.
i fall so short
of expectation
yet still the apex
of god's creation.
i carry fragility
like a well-weathered friend.
step on me
i won't break again.
for those of you
in this same place
you are the most
beautiful disgrace.
perfectly crafted
painted by number
but eden never did
outlast the summer.
the people i know
will remember me thus:
an ugly girl
who understood us.

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2004-03-04 04:32 PM

This is marvelous.

I loved all of it, but this got my attention:

"the day takes off running
i skinned my knee.
music and science
will crucify me."

And this just hammered it home:

"i fall so short
of expectation
yet still the apex
of god's creation.
i carry fragility
like a well-weathered friend.
step on me
i won't break again."

Smile.

Lady, if you're in my head I'm not responsible for any injuries incurred while you're there.

I enjoyed this much, thank you.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2004-03-04 04:58 PM

loved this honest peeling back of the outer layer of the apple, revealing the beauty within

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

3 posted 2004-03-04 05:20 PM

"perfectly crafted
painted by number
but eden never did
outlast the summer."

That image really tickled me! Thanks.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-03-04 06:46 PM

beautifully smashing... love it!

Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder.
(by Virginia Woolf)

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2004-03-05 01:38 PM

So much honesty in this well done piece of you!

nn
Member

since 2000-09-18

Posts 75

6 posted 2004-03-05 01:51 PM

Fantastic!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2004-03-05 02:48 PM

"just drag me behind you
i'll survive on exhaust."

So much in this...

Every line..

I am in awe.

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

8 posted 2004-03-07 01:10 PM

i fall so short
of expectation
yet still the apex
of god's creation

I like this. You boldly face daily obstacles with a great outlook.

...Melton

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

9 posted 2004-03-07 10:40 PM

Wishes wow ...
this is true poetry ,your beautiful i say ,
not a drop of ugly

James

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

10 posted 2004-03-07 10:49 PM

"i carry fragility
like a well-weathered friend"

what a cool line...sweet

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

11 posted 2004-03-08 10:42 AM

deeply felt and powerfully stated and full of important meaning. You write this so very well - Paul

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