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A very minor voice…
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A very minor voice… |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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A very minor voice… It was that kind of a Most very long time ago, that moment when Kids were kids and boys were boys and girls Were looking for a finding they didn’t know might be. There, in a special time, with their inner poundings that thumped, While oceanic findings of come and go Thundered pulses. The heaviest of sighs could be heard in trying, in Understanding standings that were beyond their ken, But within their kind, a courage in beating hearts pumped faster Than veins could carry… Outwardly, it seemed, slight acceptings were of pillowed And flowing sleeves, while tight pants and slender egos Stood tall for a moment while long hair curled dreams Into romance, and I was not even a flower girl for a moment, But watched them that were, And wondered what it was all about… Alfie filled my song… Was it just for the moment, we lived? Virtues being what they were, and virtue loosing ground Faster than moonshiners ran roads, Faster…till flowing sleeves hid no more… Soon enough a stance appeared, feminism spawned itself So many took up a cause like fire, burning inwardly And outwardly, factors of life long lived As tender ages wondered what if But still suppressed by love then… Somewhere, the sounds of what’s it all about, Alfie… Filled my heart….again… I am growing up finally…somehow, somewhere, Parents’ aprons strings are floating Above my head But not willingly…. For I see so much that went wrong. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karilea I am sure so many people can relate to your words. This was a great piece of writing and was so much enjoyed. I hope all is well with you, my friend. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I've heard that minor voice. Not as often as I'd like...but I do hear it. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Somewhere, the sounds of what’s it all about, Alfie… Filled my heart….again… I am growing up finally…somehow, somewhere, Parents’ aprons strings are floating Above my head But not willingly…. For I see so much that went wrong." Oh my...how I can relate to this! Wonderful Karilea...wonderful write. Hugs~
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
and when the tiny voice sang out from that corner in the back room everyone listened and some understood |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You've got such a way Karilea, and I love the way you sorted it out~ I'm sure there are many of us who can identify with this, including me. Thank you, thank you, good poetess~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
That was one of my favorite songs...I remember. Very thoughtful and thought provoking poem, and I really enjoyed the way you put it together.  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...(this seems to be my favorite expression with your words!) !!!! Eric |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
that inner voice which starts to be seen, felt, heard, above all other things...wonderfully written |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
**Sigh** your words made me ponder much...to see and understand after so many mistakes are made....if only life and parenthood came with a book of simple instructions...but we can only do the best we can with what we have...Wonderful writing that made me ponder and brought many regrets....thank you... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There, in a special time, with their inner poundings that thumped, While oceanic findings of come and go Thundered pulses. This is a great write, dear Karilea, and me too I can relate. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
I love your flow of words. And we all must grow up sometime. great write! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Nodding and smiling here dear poetess. Hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very nice! Enjoyed it! Grover. |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
A minor voice I did not know a voice could be locked in a major or minor key still this voice speaks in whimsical facades eternal question "what if" still on each we go learning we are learning maybe the greatest step on the road and so we walkstumblesplurt our ways till the next sun or moon rise mirrors spirit to soul calling muse so ever demanding watching apron string kites fluttering away alight away a minor ascending "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this write is...well...meticulously marvelous...so much intricate detail and imagery...loved it |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
There are signs here of a heavy heart, and a wistfulness for things that were not there. Beautifully written. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
This one brought back some memories of Julie Andrews and of course, Alfie. Before you have even said What's it all about, I found myself singing those words: What's it all about, Alfie? Is it just for the moment we exist? And if life belongs only to the strong,Alfie, what will you lend on the Golden Rule? Did I get them right? Lovely and nostalgic! Sadie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea "I am growing up finally…somehow, somewhere, Parents’ aprons strings are floating" Understanding |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"Outwardly, it seemed, slight acceptings were of pillowed And flowing sleeves, while tight pants and slender egos Stood tall for a moment while long hair curled dreams Into romance" The poem is nicely arranged The spacing of the first line is very effective...perfect title selection Loved the poem, Sunny... _______ice ><> |
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