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Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

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Ohio, USA

0 posted 2004-03-02 08:21 PM

Look deep inside me
Carefully glance as part of me flees
Touch where life runs away
Sensing stray energy dribbles
Lost flesh just thought it was a nibble
But looking deep I see a mess
Lost oh so much but none was flesh
Instead was life and spirit bent
On hearing yes but then was sent to find some sun
T’was under the tree
We ran so fast but stayed so still
Clinging to sounds that all ran uphill
Emptying selves but still overfull
Oh so much lies in the depths
Mind and heart thinking of sharing this view
Wishing for someone who was willing to see
To hear to share willing to find the time
To experience the bold and even sublime
This is a wish from the depths of a soul
But still wondering if I can let go

Martie

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1 posted 2004-03-02 08:29 PM

Paul...It is that deep stuff that makes such good poetry...let it out!!

Goodknight
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Ohio, USA

2 posted 2004-03-02 08:31 PM

thanks Martie - it does make for good poetry - often it is hard to find and to understand and then sometimes it is soooo personal - appreciate your comments always - Paul

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

3 posted 2004-03-02 09:02 PM

It really does help to write it out Paul...
This one expecially comes from somewhere deep inside.

~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Goodknight
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4 posted 2004-03-02 09:03 PM

thanks Nancy - it did come from the deep - suppose there is more there? Paul

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-03-02 09:05 PM

Paul...I know there is!

Goodknight
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6 posted 2004-03-02 09:07 PM

thanks for all you wonderful encouragement Nancy!!!!

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2004-03-02 09:47 PM

(big angel hugs) Oh Paul, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, write out the deepest part of you as it is good therapy and will bring peace to the heart of you, we are all here to sympathize with the sentiments, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Paul, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

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Cloud Cucko Land!

8 posted 2004-03-05 06:09 AM

"We ran so fast but stayed so still"
I loved this line, I think it bought it all together. People often feel this way in life, I know I certainly have. Another wonderful read Paul. I thoroughly enjoyed it, can't wait to see more!!

^*Kimberley*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

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