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just a miss you |
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smalls Member
since 2002-12-20
Posts 62 |
Last night I sat looking into her eyes Imagining being as close as possible. The brush of her hairline tickling my nose The wishful kiss so soft And her perfume giving me goose bumps. A reflection of smile In the glitter of her eyes As I remained distant. Because all the while my thoughts They were not reserved for that face. I had felt it but I knew it wasn’t real. In the spontaneity of our rendezvous It was just this... She was the girl I was looking at But she wasn’t the girl I missed. Please check out my poetry online |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Went back read through again after the last two bold lines. Very powerful, yet sadly beautiful. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lawrence~ I enjoyed the read ... and even more enjoyed the visit to your web pages~ Talented you are ..... I just know your parents are proud of you~ What joyful family photos you shared~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
very well written poetry - with a haunting sadness to it - Paul |
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smalls Member
since 2002-12-20
Posts 62 |
thank you for all your kind words... just curious if i conveyed my thoughts well on this one... i could now see how it could be interpreted as if i am talking to the same girl, but her mood isn't what i remembered. but i really wanted it to read as if i am actually talking to one girl, but all i can think about is a relationship of recent... sad but true... Please check out my poetry online www.soakgame.net/mrlawrencesmalls |
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