Open Poetry #31 |
Atoms |
James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I love wind It brings me atoms you have breathed |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
i like this! creative way to "look" at breathing! ~Dawn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah James, now you know anyone with a germ fetish is now reaching for a surgical mask. LOL...smile. This was very creative and I enjoyed it! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie....I love wind too! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And you take my breath away with writes as beautiful as this. *S* I guess I don't have a germ fetish... for this makes me want to inhale. *S* Excellent work! *S* |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
That was really deep James, I truly appreciate this great write of yours! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Nicely shaped and formed to express your ideas... I enjoyed this a lot. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
James -- very creative and wonderful thought!.....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
AWESOME! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
I love wind It brings me atoms you have breathed As this was still in view this morning, I thought I'd pop in and take another read. I'm glad I did. This time I read inside out and upside down. It was interesting that way too: BREATHED ATOMS BRING WIND I LOVE YOU; HAVE ME? (Well, I didn't use every word, but was close...) ATOMS HAVE BREATHED (Just the thought of those three words together!) I'm sure there are a multitude of ways a reader can translate this! AWESOME-simple but your format leads to incredible play and deep thought. |
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