Open Poetry #31 |
Note to a Landlord |
Adonis Cross Junior Member
since 2003-04-07
Posts 46Miami, FL, USA |
Today I met a man who said I'd serve the world much better dead-- He told me of the qualities I lacked; He made a list of every flaw And imperfection that he saw-- He stated each opinion as a fact. He quickly made my blood run hot By counting all the things I'm not-- He obviously never heard of tact. I had to put him in his place; I put my fist into his face, So now, of course, my bathroom mirror's cracked. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We are our harshest judge. Very good write. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Now you get to see him multiplied. Perhaps in the myriad slivers there'll be a few visions you can live with. One piece at a time. Do we ever get our deposits back? Enjoyed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
we are our toughest critics |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
everyone seems to be ignoring the qualities of this perhaps they have read of a man who wasn't there. No-on has appreciated the honesty, the imagination, the abiltity to think differently Adonis I am impressed but one voice and a lot of hard work for you, I think I met a man upon the stairs I looked again he wasn't there Dave |
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Youngatheart Member
since 2003-12-30
Posts 333 |
This is an outstanding piece of writing...well thought out and beautifully stated. Thank you for sharing your wisdom with us, Adonis. Thank you for trying to delete one of those posts. teehee...I guess I get double the exposure!! Youngatheart |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
tremendous, awesome, read and right! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know the feminine version of that critic quite well... *S* Excellent write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I think that that mirror was cracked already! Look into another one and I am sure you'll see yourself in a much better light! As painful as this was to read, I couldn't help but chuckle at the surprise twist at the end! I suppose I have a bit of a macabre sense of "humah" as Arnold S. would say! Love & Light, EA |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Thanks for the little laugh! Yes, all too often we get down on ourselves unjustly! Grover. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this gave me a giggle, but, everyone said it already..."we are our own harshest critic" great reading this! |
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