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poem titled 'two'

yourheart
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since 2003-06-26

Posts 4

0 posted 2004-02-26 05:59 PM

you need to read into this poem to understand where im coming from.. its based on the plan of a couple having two children but in the end the relationship never worked and the plans for children failed... read it a few times and hopefully it will click.. its kinda a unique writing style..

-- two --

laid back lies an indication soon to see perfect
skies deemed an overwelming feeling between both looking back
on times this mistake was told from the start princess
why couldn't you stay true

two bright eyed cradles among the vision sought once seemed
heaven held sewn become only one ours truly mine cut
short now drowning what was set to be i swear still
waiting for a sign but how when i promised all now escaped
two little angels assured but infact already lost.

--

Gemini
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

1 posted 2004-02-26 10:04 PM

I believe no poem should ever go un-noticed. Very nicely penned, full of emotion and longing.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-02-26 10:20 PM

The tearing of this dream only took one read...excellent write, and well to read over many times.
Welcome to Passions
ThisDiamond

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2004-02-26 10:54 PM

Welcome I will look forward to reading your poetry.

-Juju

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2004-02-27 07:25 PM

Came back to reconcile a thought...
only to complete two. TD

Grover
Senior Member

since 2004-01-27

Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada

5 posted 2004-02-27 07:33 PM

Very nice. Well written... look forward to future writes! Grover.

yourheart
New Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 4

6 posted 2004-02-28 07:27 AM

thanks guys!

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