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To Find Eternity Between Us |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My love It has been now many months And I am empty. In time I thought Allah would fill me With needs and purpose to do his will Yet, The rose along the river is in bloom And I have no nose for its fragrance Nor eye for the petals unfold It is void, This season when in remember I touched your hand My own find that sunlight Squeezes between fingers and air Is cold in my palms Where once I cupped your chin And held your flesh As we in press of bodies Engulfed desire in sunset hues I journey now with downcast eyes As if to find in the grains of sand That beneath the hooves of camel, scatters, Some refraction of light that I might see Your eyes or face to know again Soft morning sighs Such these days begin and end In thoughts of writing to you In dreams of jasmine and wine Or with silent gaze Toward the clouds No longer there It is now the season of rain And you flood me Still |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
your writing touches deep places inside of me my friend.... incredible write... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
OMG!!! you are so rare! do you know that? you words touch a deeper side that sometimes I'd like to forget I have....wow Ron....I am keeping this along with the many others....   Lauren~ ~~**~~ There are moments when speech is but a mouth pressed lightly and humbly against the angel's hands. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do so enjoy these desert wanderings... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 Is it on purpose? "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Beautiful! Thank you. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron In your revery is such a beauiful poet! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
With your timeless poetry, you are writing the classics for future generations!  Love & Light, EA |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ron... This is awesome. Your sensitivity to detail and description is indeed benchmark. Really. If your poetry is this good, I can only imagine reading your short stories or novels. Have any to share...??? -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you all for the very kind comments on this scribble of mine... they are greatly appreciated.. Mark... I've told a story or two and written one or two along the way, but never tackled the novel nor a short story in the same way I do poems.. or what I call poems.... I doubt I would have the skill to write anything in prose that would be worth the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang... You know I read and keep everything you write? My file folder is not yet full.. May we have more ..please? Hugs~
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I love this line Ron _____________________________ It is now the season of rain And you flood me Still This is so deep, so beautiful. it softly reminds me of a song that Toby Keith sings when he says "I'm still standing in yesterday's rain."  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Hogwash! Horsefeathers! Mollarchy! Rubbish! Fiddlesticks! Nonsense! Through your commendable humility you fail to give credit where it is due: to your factual talent in writing and moving people. If you don't wish to acknowledge it, of course that is your prerogative, but trust us when we tell you in unison, time after time, that your writing is very high caliber and we enjoy being moved by it. I, for one, would absolutely read your "scribble." If nothing else, consider it a challenge to your doubt! Mark my words: Your writings will be remembered! -MVSYou CAN make a difference: http://educate-yourself.org/ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I think, satin is working overtime these days...and will do anything he can to bring those who believe closer to his side...even if that means stagnating man with heartbreak so that he misunderstands love, the reason, the purpose, the experience....I dunno, just a thought A very elegant write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Keep hammering on him, Mark...  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... Mark you are encouraging Sunshine... please try and refrain from giving validation to her own statements..  Seriously.. thank you both for the vote of confidence and the encouragement. I may perhaps one day attempt a write of such magnitude, but for now, these excursions into words are but an escape of moments from data and logic.... Lee.. I am not sure Satan has anything to do with the story or the feelings, but I can see how one of faith might take it that such was the case. This is just a continuation of or an addition to a series written over time and inspired from the writings or Rumi. you comment as always.. was appreciated... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It is void, This season when in remember I touched your hand My own find that sunlight Squeezes between fingers and air Is cold in my palms Where once I cupped your chin And held your flesh Yanno... *S* Combine my mood and your words... and they'll start issuing flood warnings. *S* This is wonderful, my friend... I read it last night... liked it staying with me. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In time I thought Allah would fill me With needs and purpose to do his will Yet, The rose along the river is in bloom And I have no nose for its fragrance Nor eye for the petals unfold It is void, This season when in remember I touched your hand My own find that sunlight Squeezes between fingers and air Is cold in my palms Where once I cupped your chin And held your flesh As we in press of bodies Engulfed desire in sunset hues ================================== You didnt think a lil ole thyroid was gonna make me miss this one did ya.   Another beauty from this series... and you already know I am gonna second and third Mark and Kari on the prose efforts. HEY..its my job. ( gators and moths) LOL Through the water ... through the rain ... to the soul of everything |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an intense but gentle melancholy |
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