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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Closure She often comes to me in mist A mist that fades into desist A spirits force behind a veil A thought beyond horizons sail A texture with a hollow twist An odor with a swallow’s whist A sense of feeling that is rare As light to me as moving air The phantom of a tender kiss That liaisons my heart with bliss Circles round my mind in Braille A weightless weight upon a scale That powers me an ache inside A cross that holds me in abide A ghost that holds my holy grail The passport of my earthy bail She is the essence of my goal She is the closure of my soul |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Really great writing..Seymour...the flow and pace and ryme were great...very good show... Thank you.... Goldenrose. ''Each soul is potentialy divine..the goal is to manifest that divinity'' |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
I really like the rhymes... trying to comprehend the meaning... what it speaks to me of is the woman I love having passed before me waiting on the other side... not sure if that is the perspective you were writing from but that is where your words direst me. Well written and conceived. Thanks for sharing. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
That powers me an ache inside Beautiful words and thoughts, dear Seymour. The longing of your soul is expressed so lovingly. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
She is the essence of my goal She is the closure of my soul Closure is such a wonderful thing Sey, and this is as always one of your incredible writes to greet our days with. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful morning write Sy! Did I ever tell you how much I adore waking up to your words? Well...I do!  ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The phantom of a tender kiss That liaisons my heart with bliss Circles round my mind in Braille A weightless weight upon a scale ~*~ You're leaving smiles of know today... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Morning hugs, Sir Sonneteer! You write with such grace, soulfulness and beauty, that my eyes mist when I read a poem such as this by you ~ my favorite sonneteer in the whole wide world! Our Creator smiles when you create such exquisite poetry.  Loving hugs, EA |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This has such a beautiful flow to it...great write! Eric |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
That and peace must be two equal goals in a life well lived... Very tender thoughts and expression, Sy. -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
closure brings peace and shows us how unwise it was to worry...very clever write...and a great big good morning sent your way |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Wonderfully penned my friend. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
The last line had such power in it, made me melt/ lol -Juju |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The phantom of a tender kiss That liaisons my heart with bliss Circles round my mind in Braille A weightless weight upon a scale Oh, my friend... this is beautiful enough to melt a heart. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Goldenrose Thank you for the sweet reply. sea_of_okc Yes that is one of the meanings. Thank you Margherita Love and hugs back. Gentle Spirit, Thank you for the sweet reply. Nancy, No tell me again. LOL  Sunshine Earth Angel Now that is really an Angels reply. Ericc Thank you dear. MARK Thank you my friend. LeeJ And a wonderful evening to you. Gemini Thank you my friend. Juju Melting is good, thank you. suthern Thank you love, hugs. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Haunting words...so easily drawn into that rhyme...beautiful lull |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
muted Enjoyed your reply. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Yes melting is good. (: heheh Juju-- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a sense of sadness here the ending lines are always good...I love you endings |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing And I love your replies. Juju I agree. |
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