Open Poetry #31 |
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If I Could Swim A Sea |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
If I Could Swim A Sea If I could swim a sea the color of your eyes, drift until I reached a farther shore, what peaceful place would I find? Walking ashore from green into green, would I come to lie on sand as soft, as white, as warm as the skin you share with no one but a lover? Would it yield as subtly, mold as gently to my hand? And on that shore would the night lie still, dark as hair that sheens black as the crystal space between midnight stars? Would the moonlight smile as you do, a radiance that is more caress than light, and would a flowered breeze sigh sweet as the trembling breath within a depth as far as your horizon? Would I sleep in that night, and sleeping, dream of eyes that shimmer green as waves that sparkle in the morning sun? Waking, would I dream them still? [This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (01-27-2004 06:20 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie...beautiful and romantic...definately swoonable! Hugs! |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jamie~ Yes ...~ And Sis nailed it ... 'swoonable ... ahhhhh, color me swooned~ ![]() I shall now go to dream on this pillowed thought~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (sigh) Oh James, sweet friend, this is beautiful, you could swim if you dream of diving for pearls and slip on youths flippers! (big angel hugs) Your heart is an abyss of poetic wonders, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet James, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Wow James, Just sweep the ladies off their feet will you. I've been caught in dreamy eyes before. If you stare to long, you can lose yourself. Very nicely penned. If "greeneyes" stops by, she may feel you are writing this one for her. (smile) Keep up the good work. Garfield |
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Snow![]()
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
![]() "...why does my skeleton pursue me if my soul has fallen away?" ~p.neruda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gorgeous write |
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Fire Fairy Junior Member
since 2003-10-22
Posts 43Australia |
This was amazing. I could feel and see everything you described. A pure magical metaphor. Thanks for such an enchanting read. Fire Fairy xx |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Just beautiful, James, she said in a sigh. Patricia |
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muted![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
..sooooooo romantic! *sighing echoed here as well* ~Dawn |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
would I come to lie on sand as soft, as white, as warm as the skin you share with no one but a lover? Would it yield as subtly, mold as gently to my hand? And on that shore would the night lie still, dark as hair that sheens black as the crystal space between midnight stars? Would the moonlight smile as you do, a radiance that is more caress than light, and would a flowered breeze sigh sweet as the trembling breath within a depth as far as your horizon? I know... *G* I almost copied the entire poem... and in fact, it all deserves the highlighting. *S* This is so softly sensual, so dreamily romantic... so absolutely beautiful! *S* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful...very much enjoyed. Warmed me up on this cold winter's day. Hugs~ ~ Is that love I see in your eyes... |
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Ravenwolfvoyager Member
since 2003-12-25
Posts 326 |
Great work James, I think you caused a few faints in this room :-) Keep up the great work! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
very beautiful penning; this should ride the waves on Valentines day-sending it back up. sadie |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, this is a perfect write for today. Love, Margherita ![]() |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
James... Such a wonderful poetic expression on this day of love. I love the imagery within the words you have so expertly penned. Your poetic language is superb. ***Ivy Rose |
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