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Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

0 posted 2004-02-21 08:18 AM

“BROKEN HEARTS LANE”
by
Bill Charles
~~~~
My head was bowed when I walked
away from you into the night, yet
my thoughts were heavy in
surrender and I dare not look back but
I did, and the moonlight embraced
upon a silhouette as you stood on
the corner of Broken Hearts Lane
and Lost Dreams, and stared back
in return with a look I once treasured…

We stared with the eyes of broken
lover’s through the haze of the
mist as a spring breeze came forth,
tears rode on it’s back to caress your
lips and ones came back in return
to touch upon my face…

The darkness came suddenly within
the mist and you slowly vanished
from my eyes into the night as the
moonlight disappeared into the
void, and you were no more, and when
you were gone I walked away from
the mist and forlorn moments that
once was at the corner of
Broken Hearts Lane and Lost Dreams…
~~~~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2004-02-21 08:30 AM

I know that corner... finding it's all too easy, but your feet seem glued in place once you get there... you've described it well.

Youngatheart
Member

since 2003-12-30

Posts 333

2 posted 2004-02-21 08:39 AM

Bill, this is so sad and yet so beautiful.
As I read your poem, the scene from The Sound of Music came to my mind...the one where Maria and Capt. VanTrapp were in the gazebo in the moonlight. Unfortunately it moved on to a very happy ending unlike your sad story here. But maybe there is hope...you will either find peace from the pain or you will rekindle the love that you feel has left you. This was a very touching write. Bravo, Bill. Youngatheart

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

3 posted 2004-02-21 09:03 AM

"The darkness came suddenly within
the mist and you slowly vanished"
The ones who vanish suddenly in life, always vanish slowly in dreams!

This is a very heartfelt poem. You write about love so beautifully, I'm really liking your poetry.

Wonderful

^*Kim*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

4 posted 2004-02-21 01:23 PM

BC

I know that corner well. Your description is very visual including the broken heart that never seems to heal.

Ariana

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2004-02-21 01:27 PM

(big angel hugs) Oh Bill, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all those who feel themselves lost from Pleasantville, God Bless You, may the magnolias and sugar maples grace every avenue of all hearts, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-02-21 01:34 PM

that's a bad intersection

the coffee shop is nice but... let's meet somewhere else

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2004-02-21 01:35 PM

Excellent write here Bill...
Good to read you...

Hugs~

  ~ Whatever our souls are made of,
      his and mine are the same. ~

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

8 posted 2004-02-21 11:28 PM

Bill...Excellent write. Been on that corner myself a few times or so. Very creative way to look at a broken heart and lost dreams.
***Ivy Rose

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2004-02-22 05:29 AM

Beautiful, melancholic write, dear Bill. It's good to know that broken hearts do heal though ... but there are those moments when the light seems to go out and time stretches painfully.
Love, Margherita

Ravenwolfvoyager
Member

since 2003-12-25

Posts 326

10 posted 2004-02-22 09:01 AM

That last paragraph was really something. The entire write was but I suppose the way you bleeded it together was just superb. Enjoyed lots, thanks Bill.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

11 posted 2004-02-22 04:41 PM

Hiya Bill -- long time-no read, and I believe this is one of your best to date. You've really encapsulated a universal moment that will haunt many of us forever.

-MVS

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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2004-02-24 11:16 PM

Nice descriptive writing...reminds me of one I wrote, but didn't post yet, called Lonely street...James

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