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EagleScorpion
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0 posted 2004-01-26 05:39 PM



So much pain brews within.
A heart ablaze.
A lone, falling tear when I see your face.
Whispers in rain,
Torrents of pain.
Strip these feelings from me.

So much that I dont understand this day.
So much I dont want but is there.
In so many ways,
these passing days,
whispers in time are we
from the eternity sky

Feelings, cold feelings,
long shivers, smoked moonlight.
Regret,
Running from the forgotten past.
Seeking shelter from this rain

Thundering remorse sets the tides  of redemption free,
Soothing the dying embers of hate.

heavy Memories die hard.

Let my heart rest.
I dont want to hear it.
I dont want to hear it anymore, please.
Just rest your head,
Take a deep breath
I dont know how to say goodbye either.
Dont say goodbye.
It hurts

© Copyright 2004 Joseph Alexander Knob - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2004-01-26 05:44 PM


This is a wonderfully written poem. I could feel the sadness.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2004-01-26 06:29 PM




(big angel hugs) Oh Joseph, we are all here for you, dearest friend, I understand these feelings and I send hugs your way to console and know it is never goodbye, as you are guided by the spirit of your loved ones! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joseph, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Justin Deen
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3 posted 2004-01-26 06:47 PM


A beautiful piece of writing.  I am new to this site so just thought I'd say hi.. Keep writing, you have a gift...Justin Deen
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2004-01-26 06:55 PM


Very nice...James
Kahlil
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5 posted 2004-03-08 10:45 PM


ES:  this is so softly sad and beautifully expressed.  I feel it.   Saving it.  ~K~
iliana
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6 posted 2004-03-09 01:45 AM


EagleScorpion -- a good depiction of a breaking heart.  I could feel the emotion.  
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Member Rara Avis
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7 posted 2004-03-09 04:42 PM


heartfelt emotion.....so sad the ache....

~~**~~
There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands.

vandana
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8 posted 2004-03-09 04:47 PM


enjoyed
Grover
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9 posted 2004-03-09 04:47 PM


Yes, sad but well-written! Grover.
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