Open Poetry #31 |
Song of Change |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Song of Change The sun is on my back like needles liking off the hold of a callus made of sand Rub it out a jewel has been washed again and again no longer rock but the smooth touch of a friend bleached and unknotted it has gone passed the place of high tide I can hear the song of change I can feel the window opening know winter has been everywhere taking cold bites of sidewalks slipping precariously under feet Oh I can see the slide the fall the crunch of it hurts the burn where the sun is opening awareness until it sings across the distance into the oceans constant fall and I am buried in the call of sand and shimmering drenched find the summer of my years bare and brown and good where the child in jump splash shouts and is heard The sun takes me around about to you sifting snow and painting breath on window pinched and torn of hand the shovel deep laying across the driveways steep The sand leaves pieces of gold upon my skin and I'm looking for a way to mend with the heat I dig from truth a treasure not of what I have but of what I know and cherish enough to send I can hear the song of change where all the doors are slanted stuck and wood has shrunk in upon itself I open it with a simple pen and turn it toward the light of sun again |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can hear the song of change where all the doors are slanted stuck and wood has shrunk in upon itself I open it with a simple pen and turn it toward the light of sun again How very beautiful. *S* Hearing that song takes time... really listening takes courage... This is as filled with strength as it is incredible imagery. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Suthern chose my favourite lines as well Martie.. This is so special..penned as only you know how. Beautiful pretty lady~ ~ Whatever our souls are made of, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"The sand leaves pieces of gold upon my skin and I'm looking for a way to mend with the heat I dig from truth a treasure not of what I have but of what I know and cherish enough to send I can hear the song of change where all the doors are slanted stuck and wood has shrunk in upon itself I open it with a simple pen and turn it toward the light of sun again" Terrific writing about these deep matters, Martie! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh I can see the slide the fall the crunch of it hurts the burn where the sun is opening awareness until it sings across the distance into the oceans constant fall and I am buried in the call of sand and shimmering drenched find the summer of my years bare and brown and good where the child in jump splash shouts and is heard The sun takes me around about to you sifting snow and painting breath on window pinched and torn of hand the shovel deep laying across the driveways steep The sand leaves pieces of gold upon my skin and I'm looking for a way to mend with the heat I dig from truth a treasure not of what I have but of what I know and cherish enough to send I can hear the song of change where all the doors are slanted stuck and wood has shrunk in upon itself I open it with a simple pen and turn it toward the light of sun again ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ OH MY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I think I can fly after reading this!!!! THIS is what poetry was meant to be... goodness this is such a gorgeous write!! Well I cant say what I might believe ... |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Love this Martie! Can I borrow your pen? My door's stuck too... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - I can't say anymore than I have since I've been reading your writings. Great write from a talent... BC |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is very beautiful, touching poignant, very moving imagery. I like it! *smile* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
You are the consummate poet Martie - you say things here and paint images on my soul that i take deeply within. this is just the best - Paul |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"The sand leaves pieces of gold upon my skin and I'm looking for a way to mend with the heat I dig from truth a treasure not of what I have but of what I know and cherish enough to send" ....WOW... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"...I am buried in the call of sand and shimmering drenched find the summer of my years bare and brown and good where the child in jump splash shouts and is heard..." Oh, I like this, I really do.... Excellent poetry, of course you always deliver the fuel, just when my tank is on empty... enjoyed ______ice ><> |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You come word-gusting through my heart just when I thought there was no page of imagery that you had not yet turned~ Compelling~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
As the squeak of soles finds the wipe of matted retreat I find the key to riches laid upon the path of my feet An alphabet soup of mixture laced in golden ink of treasure Scolled in pen upon linen far worth their measure Divine capture of heart warmth embraced in hug of poetess reach Tugging wonder of pondered strings playing the harp on strings of teach ------------------------ Truely lovely as always sweet friend of SM pier retreat. I do so love finding your words each time I visit. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Very Compelling... lucky Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very touching, softly done |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Rub it out a jewel has been washed again and again no longer rock but the smooth touch of a friend bleached and unknotted it has gone passed the place of high tide I can hear the song of change I can feel the window opening know winter has been everywhere taking cold bites of sidewalks slipping precariously under feet as always Martie... you journey and come back with words to put perspective around those things which nag..those questions and life |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can hear the song of change where all the doors are slanted stuck and wood has shrunk in upon itself I open it with a simple pen and turn it toward the light of sun again ~*~ Smiling, smiling... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Martie, dear gal, there is nothing that you write that I do not absolutely love.... hugs to you for this and for sharing your talent with us all... peace sweetie. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
The images flow from your pen Martie. believe in what your heart feels... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There is nothing quite like your word pictures, such a rare beauty they are. Gosh Martie, this is exquisite!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, this digs deep and the imagery is exceptional. I'm keeping this, this piece of you M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Some things change, some things begin and end...some only continue. Some marbles you drop in the circle, and some you quietly leave in the bag. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
a second read was needed....as much enjoyed the second time around as the first! |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Again enjoyed! Grover. |
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