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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2004-01-27 07:27 PM

What dreams are these?

Shallow, dirty water cast
into my eyes.
I am blind, once again, for sight is crumbling..this
must be the end.

To what do I owe this pleasure?
A whipping
bird's wings in flight,
humming it's way across my flesh,
and I
begin to bleed

once again..

The sun has risen early this day
and I can smell your scent,
it's burning under the rays,
the heat is taking
it's time to melt

my senses

are gone

once again,

I am left with nothing but the time,
to count down the seconds until
you finally arrive..

I am cursed
to grasp the space in front of me,
and scream a million names I've never heard.

I have been cursed,
once again,
to shed coil after coil,
until
there's
nothing left

but lungs and a heart made of iron.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2004-01-27 09:04 PM

damnnnnnnn thats all i can say.....damn

girl you are soooo talented

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

2 posted 2004-01-27 09:12 PM

"I am cursed
to grasp the space in front of me,
and scream a million names I've never heard."

You do have a way of expressing thoughts that I really enjoy. I love what you do with words.

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

3 posted 2004-01-27 09:14 PM

Your title drew me in and your words blew me away even more. Just great!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain.

Fire Fairy
Junior Member

since 2003-10-22

Posts 43
Australia

4 posted 2004-01-28 06:18 AM

I always love reading your poetry, You are such a beautiful writer. You weave you words like magic... deep dark and magnificent. I particularly loved this one. I wish I could capture the essence of truth like you do with your words. Look forward to your next piece.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2004-01-28 06:56 AM

I have been cursed,
once again,
to shed coil after coil,
until
there's
nothing left

but lungs and a heart made of iron.

what a smack , amid the beauty of the pain

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2004-01-28 08:29 AM

Meg~

Got to say, I couldn't pick favorite lines because when I thought I had them the last line punched me in the gut..(you seem to like doing that)

Ahhhhhhh...it's a very good day when I get to read you...

Thanks for being.

"sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.."
~Dido~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2004-01-28 10:29 AM

They are right. Any one word, sentence or phrase plucked out as "best" leaves a gaping hole...that's how to tie the thoughts together, that is how the poem becomes complete, when all is dependent on another.

So enjoyed, Meghan. Thank you.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2004-01-28 12:02 PM

Wow this was amazing Karou.
I really enjoy your style of writing.
I'm glad I had the time to find this, this morning.

I'll definately have to keep my eyes open for your writing in the future.

Take Care,
Richy

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

9 posted 2004-01-28 12:15 PM

The sun has risen early this day
and I can smell your scent,
it's burning under the rays,
the heat is taking
it's time to melt

Excellent poem Kaoru~
Always love reading you gal.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

10 posted 2004-01-28 12:41 PM

I wish I could say more, but I can only sigh

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

11 posted 2004-01-29 04:14 PM

It does not get any better than this.
Perfect!

Eric

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

12 posted 2004-01-29 04:18 PM

(big angel hugs) This is a powerfully poignant write, dearest friend, let it rain only when the sun is right behind the clouds, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Meghan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light alwas shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2004-01-29 06:48 PM

Kaoru....Talented writing!...very impactful.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

14 posted 2004-03-28 07:35 PM

you are truly missed here, little sister,
come back soon.......

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2004-03-28 07:38 PM

I agree! Come back soon!

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

16 posted 2004-03-28 07:45 PM

glad i stopped by

very powerfull

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