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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
i am not much of a poet but i feel strongly about this poem.do write back if it strikes a chord with you she's a girl whos not considered a child but not an adult either lost in a world thats not completely judgemental but not unjudgemental either when she talks they say TOO TALKATIVE when she doesnot want to shes TOO SHY TOO STUBBORN when she refuses to do anything except what her heart pleases UNCOOL if she wears clothes that are a little different, FAT cause her weights not perfect, LIVES IN HER OWN WORLD if she doesnt go out with her friends whenever they want. does ANYONE know her? maybe.. not maybe.. nobody will maybe.. she herself doesnot..YET |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
the way i see this peom is that it describes everything that i hate about peer-pressure and all the poeple i call peers but i have always been a nobody- and i have liked it for my hold life i don't have to worrie about these simple pains of life. this poem is really sad that the person cares so much about what other people think about him/her he/she doens't have time of focus of theirselves...keep writing when you live you begin to die |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Even ppl. who try to say they don't care what ppl. think, do. They just do. I liked this, it exposes all the pressures. I have felt these things many times. funny how we are even judged by our friends. For not thinking of yourself as a poet, I enjoyed this. |
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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
Thx a lot for your comments,deep_inside and lexy. i agree lexy ppl who say they dont care are sometimes the ones who actually do. i wrote this poem cause i just had to.I am just sick and tired of ppl telling me who or what i am.i dont want to be judged,nobody wants to be i guess.why cant we just let people be? |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
this was really a poem that was really really close to home.wow. it was good. all to good :-) always riley i'm sitting in the dark....waiting... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I agree with deep_inside and lexy. No matter what you do your not perfect because their is no "perfect", and that no matter how you try to perfect yourself to other people, they will never be satisied. Sry if what I said doesn't make much sense, I couldn't really find the right words. LOL!  ~Alli~ |
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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
offcourse that makes sense,Alli Perfect is a concept that i just dont agree with.who decides whether im 'perfect' or not? a123 |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Well done. I liked this. "I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne |
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Fleur Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103 |
Nice Poem! ....Describes me, when I was younger... Hopefully not anymore... Very good! |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
that's me... |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
wow..gr88 poem..like evry-1 said people these dayz all they care about is beauty they act like people have no feelings or no hearts....if u do a mistake they will alwayz tell u about it to make u feel bad...just be strong and ignore the world if they dont like u..well... bye ::^love^:: |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
wow...gr888 pain inside of me. didnt like it because of the simplisticity of it. there was no flow, no rhyming, no description, it didn't even make alot of sense in places. forgive my harshness, but it was bad. |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
Your poem described peer-pressure perfectly, and how sometimes teens can be so confused as to who they are... because they just can't figure out who others want them to be. Some people don't realize it doesn't matter what other people think. sorry, that was alittle rant there but nice poem!! |
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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
thanks everyone for your comments.... love a123 |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I can totally feel this poem... I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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