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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
Take your pills Kill again Who cares what happens It's all been said It's all been said We're the fault Behind the vault Too little too late But who cares It's to late It's to late Pack your things Shoot the wind Behind the doors Lay your friends Lazy eyes Done it again I'm laughing now Do it again Do it again |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
holy crap, this is really powerful. especially the end. shoot the air loved that line ~Lex |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Think... mind telling me what this poem means to you? intriguing use of repeated sounds..but I'm a bit unclear ( probably because I'm old) what you were in the end tying to convey.. thanks! |
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thinktwice Member
since 2003-12-23
Posts 125United States |
to answer the question of "what it means to me". i chose to post this in the teen area because i thought most teens would know what i'm talking about. whether it be doing nothing and going to great lengths to occupy your mind. or on a more serious note...the motivation for some teens to kill/take life. think of columbine..i lost a friend there. this is a straight forward poem that dosn't really offer a straight forward answer, if you know what i mean. that's what it could mean to me....i don't know what all my writing means to me because it just comes out. all i know is that it's a peice of who i am and i hope someone can understand and identify with that aspect of me. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Think, Sorry, first of all, that you lost a friend in such a way. I read the piece to be a statement on society and violence, but wondered as the author if it had some other meaning to you that might add insight to an old mans mind... such violence as occored at Columbine or in other places where teens were killed and injured in such meaningless acts is certainly to be abhored. Whether occupying the mind with nothing or with a universe of possibilities... violence is simply not an answer that produces anything but more violence and much sorrow.. thanks for the insight... Ron |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I agree with Lexy on this, nice work. "And my heart still pumps twice as fast whenever you walk by. Cause I still love you."~ Blindside |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...great write here, made me think |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Beautifull write. I loved it. ~kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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