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Teen Poetry #7

feel this way

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

0 posted 2004-02-25 10:24 PM

Written for a writing prompt: Unanswerable questions.

how does she make me feel this way?

suffocated by
my clichéd feelings
and unsaid words.
the night her eyes
reflected in mine,
replays and replays,
inside my head
like a tape of
my childhood.
love failures from the past
become insignificant
and are forgotten;
when she smiles,
i am new.

a confused tear slides
over smiling lips—
missing and longing,
remembering and hoping.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-02-25 11:11 PM

hmm... very nice. ~lol~ No, really i really liked this polem!!

~Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

chicken
Junior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 44

2 posted 2004-02-26 05:53 AM

wow

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

3 posted 2004-02-27 08:57 PM

Umm, thanks guys.

For some reason this one was hard to write. I find it almost impossible to write poems about love without being cliched. The feelings have all been said.

Thanks for comments though

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-03-03 08:45 PM

That what makes it so fun. it is so challenging, when ever I write about "love" it always comes out in some weird twisted comparision.
Its a tough one.
I liked this though.
~Lex

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