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Hold your breath
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Hold your breath |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Defy your creator. I'm lounging in such a safe, and lonely place. Between these white pillows, just humming to myself. Toss the instruction manuel. I hunger for your hands. I don't know if its true... that my eyes are small and underdeveloped. I like to pretend I'm living in a fairytale. Like a good book, I can't put you down. Like a warm cup of tea, I sip you slowly through out this cold day. And you tingle the edges of my stomach, with thick warmth. Their gaping mouths, all open and red. I feel my lunch on my throat. Cause their counting my age on their four enormous hands. As if it made a difference. As if I would change easily. Well I've been struck across my heart many times, since that day in mid april. And its bigger than it looks. Because I was born with a magnifying glass in my hand. Defy your maker. You think of my words as a passing breeze, brief and thick. But hold your breath, cause I'm not closing my mouth just yet. |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
wow...they was awesome. I've read alot of good poetry and that was great poetry (to me at least). I can tell you must be proud of this one because is seems like you were able to say exactly what you wanted to say exactly how you wanted to say it. That's hard to do and you pulled it off in excellent style. I hope I get to read a couple more like that today...great job. Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
keep it up , this was a cool poem, strong feelings indeed  ....... |
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