Teen Poetry #7 |
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Whatever Your Name Is |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"Whatever Your Name Is" You would craddle her in your arms, That night in the hospital bed, I'd be in the hall on the phone, Not rememb'ring a word I've said. She'd grab my thomb so strong and tight, For the first time I'd understand. All my doubts were suddenly gone, As her head fell into my hand. I shed a tear and said:" I am a dad," But she is the baby we never had... Cause we've never met, And you're nowhere to find. But you're out there somwhere, And always on my mind. Whatever your name is... Whatever your name is... I've painted a picture of you You have got big brown hazel eyes Sparkled chocolate coloured hair Skin as soothing as a sunrise. I'd like a chance to talk to you But since you're a vision it's insane And if we're ever introduced I hope Ellisa is your name! Invite you to dinner just me and you But my dining table is not for two... Cause we've never met, And you're nowhere to find. But you're out there somwhere, And always on my mind. Whatever your name is... Whatever your name is... You're not the bride and I'm not the groom, So I'm sitting alone in my room.. Cause we've never met, And you're nowhere to find. But you're out there somwhere, And always on my mind. Whatever your name is... Whatever your name is... |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
whoa....that was good, unique above all else. excellent writing. |
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Finalinsomnia New Member
since 2003-10-07
Posts 8Washington, USA |
I have to agree with dertah. One of a kind write, really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really love this one. Im sure alot of people can relate to it. Thanks for sharing. W.W. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I really enjoyed this. It was diffent from what you normally see. Nice write, thanks for the read. Jen Everything gets better in the end, and if it's not better, it's probably not the end. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I agree with everyone else. Difently different, and it's always good to see different writings. Well done. "I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne |
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