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Teen Poetry #7

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muchos
Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

0 posted 2004-02-18 03:23 PM

life's harsh realities
brought on by peoples weary sins
give back to the earth
and take your heart to hell
you dont deserve the beauty and purity
you dont deserve to live
cry, and you will be forgiven
laugh and you will be forgotten
take all that you have left
and put it in a box
one day it will be what you turn to
for the sanity that you lost
tears are falling,
your all alone.
just cry, just breath
You'll be alright.

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

1 posted 2004-02-18 03:47 PM

Touching; very nice.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-02-18 04:38 PM

it was ok. too brief for my liking. it was better than average though.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-02-18 05:16 PM

Hey. This is good. I like it. Keep it goin'!
~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2004-02-19 01:44 AM

Powerfull meaning behind the words, very nicely done.
~Live and Laugh~

Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less
~Bella~

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2004-02-20 01:40 PM

I really like this one. Especially the end.
This one's going in my library.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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