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The Birthday Party |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
The Birthday Party By Ixxi I'm in the bedroom, Thinking. On my own. Sat on the floor out of my head. Losing myself in a hallucination, A dream floating over pins and needles, Sleep, confusion and bliss. Last time I looked downstairs There were about twelve other people. But that was about fifteen minutes ago, And I have heard many more Come through the door Since then. They have come for the drinks Although all of them are already drunk. You can tell just by listening to them, Shouting, singing, stomping, dancing Around the rooms. Pretending to be interested When talking to one another. My prescence is requested but, I do not recover from my stupor; Far too content to be concerned with my drunken friends. So they make me go down. I lie on the sofa and watch through the mist behind my eyes. The clock on the wall is trembling With the vibrations of loud punk rock beating against the walls. Almost like it's trying to escape. Then, In between the gentle haze, The floating images and the relaxing, deafening noise, I get a sudden sense of guilt, As if we shouldn't be here, we shouldn't be doing this. I feel like a thief, I'm stealing my chances. I'm taking my life for granted... I smile. I forget. Why? Because I can. I sit up and open a can of beer, Wondering if I could buy another hit tonight. That's when I hear the sirens wailing in my ears. But I pay no attention. Then I hear a scream. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
The clock on the wall is trembling With the vibrations of loud punk rock beating against the walls. Almost like it's trying to escape. these are great lines. this was my favorite part of it. the rest was ok. the ending needs something. something either more abstract or more concrete with description. instead, it just ends. this was good work though. -alex |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I agree with alex. Nice write though. I can relate. Its easy to just not care. ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Manth88 Junior Member
since 2003-06-15
Posts 45IL, USA |
I have never been in that position, but I have friends who have. It is not good. I love your poem, Very deep! !^*Manth88*^! |
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