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Some Friend You Were
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Some Friend You Were |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
Dont you realise how much you hurt me? How much pain you put me through? I thought yyou were a friend..... But you really are no different To anyone else You laughed at the jokes they said.... At the names they called me..... Somehow do you get pleasure From seeing me cry????? Because you did nothing to stop them, Nothing to help me... You made matters worse.... Just leave me alone Get out of my life I never want to see you again You said you were sorry But after what you did I cant trust you ever again You hurt me so much it wouldn't be possible For a senseless [Edited by Moderator] Like you to comprehend.... You told everyone in town Something extremely personal about my life From then on i was the biggest piece of news around Get out of my life Never come back Out of everyone I'd have thought You would know better...... seemingly not............. if i ever see you again it will be too soon......... there is more to this but its being left it out for censory reasons..... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-03-2004 11:15 AM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
This is such an enotion packed piece... Unfortunately, many people find it difficult to stand up to their peers, even when they know that someone is being hurt...I'm sorry that this has apparently happened to you. You have expressed the pain and anger very well, and I felt it deeply as I read... Nicely done... ~Vicky "When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." --Jimi Hendrix |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this was written a couple of years ago when i dropped one lot of friends to be with two new irls to the school who i thought were friends.... this is a piece that was and still is like a fresh wound.... it still cuts really deep, and probly always will..... but this is something ive dealt with and worked through with this poem..... its my way of working through everything..... thanks for the replies... this is me.... like it or not.... |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really like this piece. You got your emotions across very strongly. Excellent job, thanks for sharing. W.W. |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
To me, it doesn't really sound poetic. It sounds like an angry email to a friend, and if you read it aloud it wouldn't sound like a poem. However I like your ideas and the fact that you can express your feelings about someone and it shows you're a sensitive, emotional person with talent. x |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Very wonderful hun!! If you ever ever need a friend ill be there for ya i promise just let me know you can always read my friend poem as well just to let ya know that someone does care!! Hugs and a Kiss, Chris |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
thanks for that chris...... same goes for you... if you ever need any help or advice just send an email and i will see what i can do for ya..... Mel this is me.... like it or not.... |
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