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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Once again I feel I have lost the game now only my words of repeated pity comfort me. A situation gone dismissed by ignorance to be chalked up as another lesson in life. Compounded together to lack of reasoning amplified by my juvenile fears. I only wish right now for another try realizing now what I lacked yesterday. Broken dreams and late promises of tomorrow take away my foolish pride for today. |
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overtyoureyes New Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 5 |
wicked writing style... very dark, strong. i love it. but remember - in order to make poetry flow, (rhythm is the heart!) proper punctuaion is neccissary... don't change your flex at all!!! just maybe put a comma where you'd draw a breath? |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
i disagree rythm is for those who have it at soul. i know where youre coming from my friend. at least from my interpretation. ahh, lets here it for realizing things too late. heres a proverb for you: though it may cost you everything, find understanding. good write by the way. |
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