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sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

0 posted 2004-01-25 01:25 PM

ALL MY LIFE

It was not so long ago
when I thought I'd never meet someone like you.
Wrong was I, thinking I'm in control
Believing I'd never fall.

All my life I thought no one would
melt a heart like mine, a heart so cold,
a heart hardened by the past,
protected by shields so vast.

Slowly I was falling
without even knowing.
Only to find out too late
I have no choice but to accept my fate.

I could dream, I suppose
forever, I could hope
there will never be any 'us', that's our destiny
so I wake up to reality.

I lied when I said
I didn't love you,
that my feelings for you
are through.

I lied
not because I wanted to
but because I love you
and I still do.

I wouldn't do a thing to hurt you
but I just have to let go.
I can't hold on much longer
'coz for us there's no forever.

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

1 posted 2004-01-26 12:55 PM

I liked this. I've read some of your other things on the boards, and you've made a large improvement. Very nice.

Your life was lost; sweetheart I grieve for you
Sweetheart, I wish there was something I could do
But sweetheart, there's no hope for you

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-01-26 10:10 AM

it was ok. this sounds like many of the other ones posted on here. find some more original ideas.
-alex

now im alone, but not lonely like before

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-01-26 04:35 PM

I think this was a wonderfl poem. Yes, you could use some improvement, but hey, couldnt we all. I know i could! lol I think this is one of your best poems i have read so far! Keep up the good work!
~kissa~

**~kissa~**
*I wanna be a little more like me, and a little less like YOU!*~ Linkin Park

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

4 posted 2004-01-26 05:51 PM

thanks for all ur comments...i know i dont focus so much on spelling as long as i prove what i am saying {: get me? lolol thanks once again and keep in touch

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

5 posted 2004-01-27 05:12 PM

Good work! This poem was awesome, I felt it the whole way through. ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

6 posted 2004-01-27 05:13 PM

Good work! This poem was awesome, I felt it the whole way through. ~Jess

"Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse

sweet_lost_palestinian1
Member

since 2004-01-08

Posts 90

7 posted 2004-01-28 11:57 PM

thanks all for ur reply its really sweet of u:-]

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