Teen Poetry #7 |
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Nothing I can do. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The love i have for you, Is anything but untrue. You were always there for me, and for that you have my undying gratitude. It would be a sin to say that i dont still have feelings for you. but oh how i wish those feelings would go away. Then maybe i could get through the day, without crying over you! You dont realize how much you hurt me, how your cruel words sting worse than a bee! Why cant you see? Why cant you just leave me be?? You are something i want, but dont need. My love for you, will never end. Even though you make me so blue, but theres nothing i can do! I try so hard to get over you. Try not to feel the way i do. Try not to let you, make me so blue. But like i said, there is nothing i can do, for now it's up to you! ~kissa~ There are three things we will endure- Faith, Hope, and Love- and the greatest of these is Love!~ 1 Corinthians 13:13 **~kissa~** |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
not bad, i can see the emotion behind it... "You are something i want, but dont need." That was my favorite part. I hope to hear more from you ![]() ~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I see emotion behind it as well, but the rhyming does sound a little forced. Also, in some parts the poem does not seem to flow. Anyway...this is my favorite part: "I try so hard to get over you. Try not to feel the way i do." Good write, can't wait to read even more! ![]() ~Alli~ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
I CAN REALLY RELATE TO THAT SOO MUCCH,,........GOOD ,AMAZING KEEP WRIITING Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!! |
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