Flowers To Bring Back The Lost

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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-01-18 07:22 PM

Flowers To Bring Back The Lost

Intruders on the endless horizon,
In our midst, They glow like neon.
Vacate the shame of the tiers
And tumble them into the desert of dried tears.
Who knows we lied again to the gullable?
Who knows we only loved again to the loveable?
Breath in your chosen breathe without control,
Suffocate yourself when you realize you have no control.
These different strangers follow in the footsteps of pas leaders,
Showing us all what * ure means to those beside trash can heaters.
Silver jewels are thrown out by golden trash collectors,
They pursue the want, gain the peice and call in inspectors.
Their lives shall be as golden trash in the end,
When seven trumpets blow to stop the trends.
Let's continue in our hastily useless action unto the last hour,
Then wait to see the earth shake like us and the last real power.
Swiftly pull me away from the pack by ripping my hands away,
I'm reaching for the crowd all the while, screaming profanity to stay.
I'll lay myself on the lonely bed and cry my cares far
All the time ha*ing myself for caring where the crowds are.
Let's swallow whole our pride with it's ugly head that matches ours,
Choke! Let's Choke! Die! Let's Die! Endings are beautiful with graveside flowers.

Those intruders on the endless horizon,
In our midst, They glow like neon.
Those creatures of light, rhetorical beings of above
Show us the insecurities of society and our fakened love.
Truth is to be known to our blackened eyes
But we have poked them out with our lies.
Smile, laugh, cry, love, ha*e, ask why?,
Live, get riches, make fame your name, then die.
your answer is left in the middle of all this,
Catch this hidden meaning and one day you may catch His.

now im alone, but not lonely like before

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

1 posted 2004-01-19 07:25 PM

I keep reading and rereading this, but I can't think of anything to say. I promise, though, I'll be back later with wonderful comments.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2004-01-19 11:14 PM

I have to say that you have a lot of talent. This poem was really raelly good. I don't know what else to say, just keep writing. Thanks for the read.
Jen

Whoever said "Tis better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all" obviously never loved.

EverRuss
Member

since 2003-12-31

Posts 66
Indiana

3 posted 2004-01-20 12:24 PM

very meaningful and deep.. I like what you have done here...i expect your next posts will be just as good

If my poems could talk they would mean more than the words

Russell

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-01-21 08:30 PM

I see a religious connection. And this is oh so true. It sickens me. The striving after nothingness.
Excelent poem!!!
It was inspiring.

"Who knows we lied again to the gullable?
Who knows we only loved again to the loveable?"
great lines. never made me want to stop reading.

ascending_ecstasy
Member

since 2004-01-21

Posts 102

5 posted 2004-01-21 08:31 PM

Ok well your poem was good, and you have talent. Although, i must say i became a bit lost... some of your rhymes are a bit forced, let your writing flow...

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