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Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

0 posted 2003-10-02 05:20 PM

Alright this is a little old, and I'll give you guys some love poetry some other day.

"Paper's Tear"

Your fingers slide gently down the print
gazeless and broken without stride.

The sentences and abbreviations cut all too short
for this is your gratitude upon my life.

With every lost thought and pulsating reaction
you hate and crinkle me more.

A rage of hostile fury bound by loving compassion
still hands mangle me into thoughtless trash.

Ripped and torn; scorned and broken till satisfied
but you can't fix what has been done maliciously.

Folded is foregiveable,
Creased is fixable,
Wrinkled is forever,
knowing that the paper will never be the same again

NJS

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-10-03 11:45 AM

touching...very touching. we all have some wrinkles, dont we?

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

2 posted 2003-10-04 04:44 AM

I meant to reply to this a few days ago and forgot...stupid me.
I really love this one...a lot. I just found it very unique and touching. The idea was awesome.
Looking forward to more from you. This is going in my library.
-Kristin

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2003-10-04 04:58 AM

This is excellent, Nicholas.
You've done a great job of conveying this
from the perspective of the paper.
VERY nicely done.
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

4 posted 2003-10-04 09:10 AM

I really liked this. I'm sorry I can't give you a better reply, but I'm so numb from well, I won't go into what from, cuz nobody really cares, but anyway, nice write, and thanks for the read.

"Worry is like a rocking chair--it gives you something to do but
it doesn't get you anywhere." -- Dorothy Galyean

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

5 posted 2003-10-04 12:50 PM

I really enjoyed this. The context was very unique and original which was a refreshing change and the words were simply beautiful. So hauntinly sad and so touching...lovely.
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

6 posted 2003-10-15 10:48 AM

OOOOO! Beautiful job. Wow...this was a very original idea. Nice work. I'm pretty much speechless. Very beautiful job. It's definitely going in my library for future reading! Ah...I just loved it.

*I figured out that trust was just my one mistake...*

Quiet Acquiescence
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 70
somewhere out here

7 posted 2003-10-15 06:01 PM

"Folded is foregiveable,
Creased is fixable,
Wrinkled is forever,
knowing that the paper will never be the same again"

What can I say? It...it was..beautiful.

~*~Hope restores broken wings; faith helps us fly.~*~

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

8 posted 2003-10-15 06:42 PM

I'm glad I can bring some original thought here and have everyone who read it like it as well. We can all agree that it's not easy being a poet in any sense; no matter how smooth the words flow out. There's sooo much talent here and I'm just happy people enjoy my writings; believe me I got more so stay with me everyone. Thanks.

NJS

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