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the_fortress Junior Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 28 |
My body filled with sorrow My heart is yours to borrow I don't believe I need it anymore It's reached it's capacity It can do no good to me Take it so you will not be alone You smile is in my head I am happy i'm not dead My life will be fulfilled I've reached my final bidding A conclusion has arrived We could be together one on one again I'll love you in the morning Or in the afternoon I'll love you in the springtime When the winters through I will love you always Through the thick and thin Believing this is greatful And I will soon begin |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
not bad, the last paragraph was my favorite! keep writing ~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I have to agree with Leah on this one, the last paragraph was my favorite too. It (the last paragraph) kinda reminded me of the Dr. Suess book Green Eggs and Ham. The way the poem flowed was kinda like the rhyme in the book (the rhythem and stuff). I mean that as a compliment!! Don't get me wrong!! lol!! About the name...hmm...let me think about that and I'll get back to you in a couple days! Overall, great poem! I give it a thumbsup!  ~Alli~ |
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