Teen Poetry #7 |
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One Minute... |
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BWriter22 New Member
since 2004-01-03
Posts 4 |
One Minute... I saw you, our eyes met you smiled and I dont regret falling in love in just 1 minute staring in your eyes like your heart was in it breathing deeper I couldnt believe my heart was content filled up with joyous glee But I didnt know you not even your name a flicker of light, and a blink of the eye I saw you again passing by pulling the courage to talk to you I stepped up with out knowing what to do words came to my head, but none seemed right whispering I love you, with so much fright you looked in my eyes, gave me a smile and said these words that made me go wild " I fell in love with you a minute ago, and now I will never let you go " -Bryan_V.- |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
first off, welcome to piptalk. your poem was pretty good, it was a typical love poem. you stopped rhyming right in the middle, you might want to take a look at that.keep posting stuff!! -alex |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Awww...how sweet, we have another romantic to add to the list! Welcome to pip my friend and may you have a long warm and happy stay! check your email for a specail note! ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
I liked this one a lot. keep up the good work! |
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