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Teen Poetry #7

My first poem on here

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

0 posted 2004-01-03 01:23 PM

"The Teenager's Sewing Accident"

Four people watch the autumn sunset
On crimson late afternoons,
And light incense sticks
To look through kaleidoscopes.

Four people like to burn old litter,
And do scientific experiments
After the dark has gone.
Four people are long forgotten.

Four people are bored and curious,
And argue with their family;
These four people rarely eat
But like to drink instead.

Four people buy time on stolen days,
Four people smell of ash
And a sweet unknown smell
That only they are familiar with.

Four people started a fire,
And ran away from what they started,
They tried to escape -
But then, one person died.

muchos
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since 2003-11-29

Posts 102

1 posted 2004-01-03 01:54 PM

i liked this one, it gave me chills. it was good i like it. excellent post. keep up the great work

Ixxi
Member

since 2004-01-02

Posts 77
England

2 posted 2004-01-03 04:18 PM

Thanks... It was difficult deciding on whether it was suitable for the Forum. In the end it read it through and figured that it was ok.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2004-01-03 05:54 PM

That was a really good first post. Welcome to pip, hope to read more from you soon

~*~Karen~*~

~You can close your eyes to things that you don’t want to see, but you can’t close your heart to things you don’t want to feel~

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2004-01-03 09:17 PM

Welcome to pip! This was certainly a different kind of poem and I enjoyed it emensly!! tickled my fancy so to speak, very nicely done. Check your email for a specail note.
~Live and Laugh~
Bella

[This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (01-03-2004 09:18 PM).]

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