Teen Poetry #7 |
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the_fortress Junior Member
since 2003-12-31
Posts 28 |
Hi, this is the first poem that i'm going to post. I want to see what you people have to think. Let me know please. Constant bickering About life’s little problems Financial problems are issues And issues as told Not for a kid inside Not ready to grow old Looking and feeling Just isn’t enough Becoming is frightful Frightful enough I’ve made up my mind No turning back The rejection bag is full now And ready to crack But the fears keep coming Into my head Pushing them away I crawl into bed Am I different From the rest? Or do I fall Second best? I hate the stresses Of being here Wanting again To belittle myself |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
this was a very good post. a few parts seem forced, but we all have that problem. i know how you feel in this poem, its life's little lessons i guess. have a good new year, keep your chin up |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Very nicely done! Welcome to piptalk and may you have a warm and happy stay. I enjoyed this post and it seemed to flow quite well though I do agree with Muchos on the forced part. You have just explained something that I think happens to all of us at one time or another old enough now to face reality but still young enough to not want to. Please check your email for a little note! ~Live and Laugh~ Because of you I laugh a little harder, smile a little more, and cry a little less |
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