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Death´s sweet sorrow
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Death´s sweet sorrow |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
By stroke of midnight, the moons overhead shining in the dark, showing its face A complete silence,Silence of the dead wails of anguish pierce the night, and Fate arrives in Death´s sweet sorrow a beloved elder has left mortal life another of the tribe gone tomorrow heart-wrenching sobs break open the late night a stillness falls among the village no dogs bark, the sobs and cries pause no one wants to talk no words to say people fall quiet,hardly knowing the cause the keepers of the settlement keep vigil untill dawns light, the women keep the dead accompanied till they finally part faces serene without emotion, just still heads bowed in rememberance, as the elder,speaks to them deeply heart to heart when the sun rises, the soul leaves to where they now belong sorrow and heartbreak lands on the sleeping like a disease children wake from their slumber,teary,forgetting what it means to be strong it must be great for the Ngozi, what a mad feast all the sadness, pain wrenching grief overwhelming all the adults in such a sweet sorrow drowning the little ones in such memories reminding all that cholera might not let Them, live to see tomorrow no more having to gather food or hunt never again to arange dowries or hold their child not any more to feed daughters or sons maybe the last time to look at thier homeland, Africas wild In Death´s sweet Sorrow An African spirit note- Ngozi= from africa , they are spirits of people who are not let go of they have some tie to the human earth left, or they were mureded and they haunt people til they are recompensed [This message has been edited by rhia_5779 (08-31-2006 04:42 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rhia~ It would appear that you put a lot of productive research into your piece ... and I found that intriguing~ I found the typos distracting ... you should take the time to use spell-check and present your poetic ideas in a more polished fashion~ Nice effort ... I'd love to see it polished~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi rhia, This is by far one of my favorites by you! What I really liked about this one was all the imagery in it, the descriptive words you use are wonderful. Plus all the thought you put in this one really shows through - Great job Thanks for sharing  "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I really enjoyed this poem! Keep writing!  ~Alli~ |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i felt it just overwhelm me with emotions for these people i didn't know it takes much to do that and i am glad you posted the poem it was very good |
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