Teen Poetry #7 |
Not That Special |
mgoodman1989 Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93Iowa, USA |
HOW DOES A GUY LIKE YOU LIKE A GIRL LIKE ME? I'M NOT ALL THAT SPECIAL WHAT DO YOU SEE? WE MET ON A BUS WHEN WE WERE FIFTEEN A YEAR LATER LIES A BEAUTIFUL SCENE AS IF FROM A FAIRYTALE OUT OF A BOOK I NEVER THOUGHT YOU'D GIVE ME A SECOND LOOK HUNDREDS OF MILES AWAY YET HOURS ON THE PHONE BEING AWAY FROM YOU A NEW SENSE OF 'ALONE' I FINALLY RETURN HOME TO ''I LOVE YOU'' THEN SUDDENLY YOU DON'T WHAT DID I DO? REFUSING TO TELL ME FOR FEAR OF THE TRUTH IF WE CAN'T BE HONEST THEN WHAT IS THE USE? FINALLY WE DISCUSS IT AND MAKE OUR AMENDS THE SADNESS IS GONE MY FRUSTRATION ENDS YOU ASKED ME THE QUESTION I'VE BEEN DYING TO HEAR I RESPOND QUICKLY WHILE I SWALLOW A TEAR YOU SAID YOU WERE AFRAID THAT YOU MIGHT LOSE ME BUT THAT WON'T HAPPEN I'M LUCKY YOU SEE? YOU KNOW MY MISTAKES YET YOU DONT RUN AWAY I'LL LOVE YOU FOR EVER I JUST HOPE THAT YOU'LL STAY [This message has been edited by mgoodman1989 (08-22-2006 04:00 PM).] |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
A little confusing in parts but overall great write. I did love the rhyme in this piece. it flowed well, sometimes when you write(well when i write,anyway)I just cant get the words to come so i force them out and it sounds all twisted and dumb. This poem is the complete opposite, so good job. love ya Tempest |
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mgoodman1989 Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93Iowa, USA |
Thanks tempest. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi mgoodman1989, Nice poem! I didn't find it to be that confusing so I must be missing something... I also liked the rhyme in this, nothing seemed forced, it just seemed to flow really well. The only thing I dislike is the caps, it's kind of annoying. Yet, that could just be me once again. Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed reading this one "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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mgoodman1989 Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93Iowa, USA |
Sorry about the Caps Stargal... Actually, the Caps on our computer was stuck... so lol yeah, it ended up all being caps.... Thanks for the replies! |
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