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I Sang You My Song
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I Sang You My Song |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
This one is inspired by two friends of mine. It's kind of their "Story"... Best Wishes, “I Sang You My Song” (29/11/03)© 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved With Spontaneous lines, Disgraceful guitar play. I poured out my heart, From the windowpane. When you turned and smiled as you were leaving, I found out that life did have a meaning… I SANG YOU MY SONG, ONLY YOU CAN FILL THIS VOID. I SANG YOU MY SONG, MAKE A MAN OUT OF THIS BOY. ‘CAUSE THIS IS WHERE YOU BELONG. I SANG YOU MY SONG, MY SONG… Cried myself to sleep, Picturing your eyes. While you where away, Then I realized. Fell head over heals as you waved goodbye, You shun like a newly hatched butterfly… Chorus You agreed to give us a try I were so happy I could cry And I do believe, within you and me We’ll spend forever, together, For things can only, get better. Ever since the day we tied bonds, Ever since I sang you my song… Chorus |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
it was alright. i didnt like the chorus, the rhyming in it kinda killed it for me. the first verse was very very good though. if you could get more like that, it would make this alot better. good job though!! -alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
sing your song over and over. i like hearing it. but maybe a little bass in the backround... lol Meg I give you my number when you sad you call me i make you happy- "Don't Worry Be Happy" |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
great job  |
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