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Conquer The Lost |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN 
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Conquer The Lost Clouds shroud the moon Hiding the mystery of night The day will come soon Leaving only a hint of the darkness past The pounding and drumming Of the earth below my feet Always keeps me running Whats the fear? What is to hide? Theres none to confide in The darkness Inhales the light Exhales its black breath Sun please carress Come and hold the fight Before the end comes to pass Light the black It makes it all pure White has fought back The day is finally here It exposes all for what they are The liars are in disbelief Untruths are no longer spread far They have finally been set free now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
there is always hope. glad to see u know that too. great write. hope to see more like it. (my only criticism is use punctuation and caress is spelled like i just did) other than that i don't think there is anything that needs to be changed. u can't critique feelings. Meg I give you my number when you sad you call me i make you happy- "Don't Worry Be Happy" |
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Ally Stone Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 48D.C. |
I always love your poems! Great write! ~A~ |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
"The darkness Inhales the light Exhales its black breath Sun please carress Come and hold the fight Before the end comes to pass " That whole verse was amazing. I am going to look for more of your stuff. " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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