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PoetAtHeart13
Junior Member

since 2006-08-11

Posts 24
Maryland

0 posted 2006-08-11 09:16 PM

Thursday, August 10, 2006:

I dont wanna be
or become
another teen statistic.
Judged and underestimated.
But they wouldnt relaize
the realistics,
because they dont see people.
And I just wanns
scream and shout
and go belistic
because we dont get a chance.

And these teachers
are supposed to be
so helpful and great.
But chalk is made from their
degrating and hate.

They take out their anger,
stress, depression, and sadness
on us.
Liek it's our fault
that tehy can't
find a way to vent,
and have no better way
for their time to be spent.
They only sip coffee,
like a drup to forget...
Short term.
Only for a minute,
while they read the current event.

Then give us tons of homework,
that we never learned about.
Knwoing they they're to lazy to check it,
so we just write numbers and formulas in Math
and vocabulary sentences in language arts.
'Cause all they do is walk around
the classroon,
with their red pen
and put checks on anything,
nothin that's real.
But it's real
to steal someone else's paper.
That's the deal.

And I used to be,
one of those kids,
who stole papers
and wrote anything,
until I realized
that I was wasting my time.
Not learning anything.

So now,
I do my work,
because oneday,
they just might collect it.
Not to mention,
that my grades can't take anymore damage,
because I ahve a future.
And want one, too.
So I gotta stay true,
and stop lying
in my handwriting.

So we start to show-off
and misbehave.
And throw paper
and crayons
like we did
back in Middle School.
Because we're bored
and fed-up,
with the lessons
and put downs.
From the teachers,
telling us to shut-up
and drop-out.
And beconme
another teen statictic.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-08-11 09:40 PM

And I used to be,
one of those kids,
who stole papers
and wrote anything,
until I realized
that I was wasting my time.
Not learning anything.

yup, i've been here before:P. i liked this poem it made sense too... the flow was off in some parts but otherwise it was good.
Krysti*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-08-12 01:35 AM

Hi PoetAtHeart13,

Welcome to piptalk! I hope you are enjoying the site as much as I have...

I just wanted to say I thought this was an awesome poem on your part. Yet, I must admit that in some ways I read this as a rap... Don't know why, could be because I'm listening to rap right now, but it just seemed to fit...

The title of this poem was great btw- I liked how it was able to capture you into reading the poem...

Thanks for sharing, I can't wait to read more!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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PoetAtHeart13
Junior Member

since 2006-08-11

Posts 24
Maryland

3 posted 2006-08-12 11:18 AM

Yeah, you could probably say it sounded a little like a rap, because it's supposed to be a Spoken Word poem, so yea, read fast and everything also.

To both of you, thanks for the reply and honesty. Much luv and respect.

!~Rissa~!

silentmage13
Junior Member

since 2005-11-20

Posts 14
Florida

4 posted 2006-08-17 02:01 PM

This is awesome!!!
I can't wait to read more!

Hope can only be found inside yourself, never in a person or thing.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2006-08-17 05:50 PM

Your words say a lot..and I feel bad for you and others who have teachers that speak to you that way..I have heard and seen it myself in the high schools...

watch your spelling

I enjoyed your rant

M

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