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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131
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Breathing has never been this hard, I look at you, you look away, Trying to hide this in the pit of myself, Hollows out my chest more everyday... Cold to the touch, Bitter is the taste, Secrets are the stitches, That hold my skin in place, This vacant hole inside my chest Reminds me of what used to be, Bloody and dripping from your hands, Still then you fail to see, The words on my tongue, thoughts in my head, Scream out for you to hear, Your distant eyes, Your empty smile, Being alone is what I fear, My heart in your hands and skipping a beat, Your silence soon will end, Just like all those times before, You'll make things right again, I'll smile for I'll feel whole, Forget those secrets that I keep, Stitch back up again, The reminder, you've failed to see... I see me frowning in your eyes... |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
"Breathing has never been this hard" I loved this first line.. Great way to start off the poem.. "Cold to the touch, Bitter is the taste, Secrets are the stitches, That hold my skin in place" This was my second favorite part of the poem. It was very descriptive but still simple in a way. Thank you for a very enjoyable read once again. ~heather~ going in my library  Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I have to agree with you... that was also my fav. part in the poem. Nice job by the way. I hope to see more of your work later on. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
good poem it was well written and i liked the flow. Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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