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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain 
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i give him so much love, Yet I get nothing in return, Unbearable pain inside, I wish I could stop the burn. Inside I feel empty, Except for the painful tears. What little happiness is left, Can it last through all my years? Because he won't be there, To help me along my way, So I guess the love I feel, Keeps me from going astray. To write about my love, Is to write about my pain, Because they go hand in hand, As I wipe my tears again. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
it was very good. could feel the emotions behind it and the flow was really good rhia |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"To write about my love, Is to write about my pain" I liked this part a lot! I think it is because a lot of will write, at some time or other in, about our pain. It's like an addiction to put it down on paper! lolz The first stanza is my favorite though! It expresses so much in so little. It was a wonderful way to start the poem off. Great job with this poem and I can't wait to read more by you  @-->--- |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I loved this. Great job.. I loved the first two lines of the last stanza the most.. this was wonderful . Keep it up. ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i liked this poem good write Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Because they go hand in hand, As I wipe my tears again. just had to write again cuz i missed so much the first time......wow. Krysti* |
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