Black Tears To Cure Me (Hopefully)

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lace_of_light
Junior Member

since 2006-08-02

Posts 44

0 posted 2006-08-02 03:22 AM

Blacker than the night
You run down my face
Given to shine in light
Criss-crossing patterns in black lace

Sweeter than the sugary ice
Remain a streak
My tastebuds intice
A dripping faucet's leak

You well and flow from my eyes
Describe emotion
You add to my pain and cries
Causing a commotion

You fall in line
One by one you slide
Raising the benign
Impossible to hide

A dead giveaway
Something must be amiss
You stick with me all day
Deserving a loving and warming kiss

Just watching you drop
I enjoy the sound
You end below and start from the top
Afterwards my head will pound

Believing that you're the cure
Knowing you'll assist
You are the ones who can cleanse me pure
If only I persist

Continue to slip from me
In pain and joy fall
My suffering is relieved
Just a few is all

Curl up against my body
Dampen my chin
Humbly not haughty
I feel the surge from within

Now I am fine and ready to live
Just because of the tears
My body so generously gives
My mind hears

I'm okay, trust me now
Really believe my tale
They healed me somehow
All it took was a simple wail

And now I'm happy for another day
Just one
It will dissolve away
Then the tears will once again come

Are you cold inside?
I am

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-08-02 11:23 AM

Hey Lace_of_light,

WeLcOmE to PiPtAlK! It's always nice to see a new face around here. I hope you enjoy your stay with us.

This poem you wrote is amazing! I loved it; kind of dark and chilling when you read it.
I liked how it was kind of an emotional rollercoaster, tearing you down, building you up, and tearing you down again in the end, at least for me. It was an excellent write and I can't wait to see more!

Thanks for sharing and once again Welcome!

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tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

2 posted 2006-08-03 11:15 PM

Welcom to piptalk!

awesome first post! your vocabulary is very good in this. I hope to see more from you!

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I just want to find my way back to you...where love is strong and feels brand new.

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

3 posted 2006-08-04 12:47 PM

At the risk of parrotting those above, welcome to Piptalk! And i really think this is amazing! Very emotional, though the flow was iffy everyonce in a while, i really loved it! Excellent job, excellent first post!

When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me.

lace_of_light
Junior Member

since 2006-08-02

Posts 44

4 posted 2006-08-04 12:49 PM

thankies you guys it's nice to know i have a little support (better than none, i guess)

"areyouinorareyouout? eitherwayyoucan'twin." he said. "butthefallwillbefantasticandwhat'sleftisnothinglessthanperfection"

Silver and Cold

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

5 posted 2006-08-09 05:51 PM

I really liked it. It has a lot of emotion and feeling behind it. And its another excellent piece from you. Keep up this awesome work!

A sign in the wind
The fatal last breath
Soft prelude to death
Alone
Amidst black roses

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