Teen Poetry #7 |
hey this is my first poem on this website check it out! |
broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon |
Its been months and your still on my brain its like this constant pain i was foolish to think you would still care but now i have to wake up every morning knowing you wont be there I should know not to trust people I just didnt think this would go anywhere then i started to care You told me you wanted me I told you i would consider a few days past I changed my mind I wanted you too... all you said forget you I guess i hurt you alittle bit more then i meant to... Where did all your thoughts of me go it looks like they wentout the window I guess this is what i deserve I played games to get your attention I got it at first All the fights we would get into stay in my mind Ive never missed anyone so much I always ask about you... People say that youve moved on youve always had a thousand girls why am i still thinking about you I tell people im fine dont worry about me Inside im dying for them to see I just want a chance to be you and for these tears to stop their flow |
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UnsilencedWords666 Member
since 2003-11-19
Posts 63Broken Memories & Falling Tears |
First of WELCOME...now, I really like yourpoem becasue I can definitly relate to it...it definitly hit me right in th middle of my heart and brought a tear to my eye as I aplied it to my life...good job! and welcome again:o) *~*Nessa Bear*~* You can’t choose who you are Only what you will be Why can't you choose To let me be me...*~*Nessa Bear*~* |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, first of all, welcome to PIP. it sucks that you're in this situation (if the poem relates to real life, which in my opinion it seems like it does) i think most of us have been there, so this poem does a good job of letting people see how it relates to their own life. all in all... it was a pretty good first post. -bergundy- "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Welcome to pip, I really liked this, I could really relate to it because I have so much trouble getting over people I loved that have since left my life. ~*~Karen~*~ |
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martina Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 59 |
Hi welcome to pip I really liked your poem it really was a great poem I hope to read more of them soon. Martina |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I loved your poem. It was really touching. I think a lot of people can relate to it in some way or another! I hope to read more! ~kissa~ |
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