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synthetic
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since 2006-06-10
Posts 70
ontario, canada

0 posted 2006-07-16 09:53 PM


I'm asking you to grow with me;
without doubts, without fright.
I'm asking you to follow me;
no map, through danger, no light.

Be sure to keep your feet by my soul;
walk along side my passions.
You'll see your strides fit the mold;
i'm divided in two you're the other fraction.

Matches made in graceful bliss;
where our targets are never missed.
Matches made our love ablaze;
these sentiments are more than a phase.

The meek will inherit the earth;
and what of the universe?
I'm weak when you're not around;
I've seen your body, but heart's not found.
Take a moment to lead me on;
draw me into your song.
Lay me down before you
and make one out of our fractions that are two.
The meek will inherit the earth;
and what of the universe?
That is for those who find everything in one place.
That is for those who have laid their eyes on your face.


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stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-07-17 01:24 PM


"The meek will inherit the earth;
and what of the universe?
I'm weak when you're not around;
I've seen your body, but heart's not found.
Take a moment to lead me on;
draw me into your song.
Lay me down before you
and make one out of our fractions that are two.
The meek will inherit the earth;
and what of the universe?
That is for those who find everything in one place.
That is for those who have laid their eyes on your face."


My favorite part in the whole poem, that is if I had to choose a favorite! There are so many good lines in this and that makes it hard to choose...

I liked your use of wording, it was nice to see some of the words you used that I do not see often in poetry. It was also different, kind of unique.

Thanks for sharing

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cherrys_rule
Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

2 posted 2006-07-22 09:47 AM


I have to agree w/ stargirl... that was my favorite part too. Nice poem though.
gostwriter
New Member
since 2006-06-27
Posts 4

3 posted 2006-07-22 05:15 PM


Matches made in graceful bliss;
where our targets are never missed.
Matches made our love ablaze;
these sentiments are more than a phase.

I thought this was an interesting part because of the double meaning with matches..you're good..i'll give you that and your poetry is intersting..keeps me enjoying it..post some more!! bye!

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