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excalibur, a different truth
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excalibur, a different truth |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Excalibur, Excalibur come to me A part of my hand as I look beyond and see With you I can attribute greatness and glory Fully accept destiny fate and duty Sword, of old, ancient ones Be part of this world again Your time has come For what you were made, a linking chain Of all that is good, all that is human and bad Many have died painful deaths just to see you once more Helping us to remember, haunting pasts Ancient ones, not forgotten stories, still telling old lore Of all the heroes, Rhia, Merlin, lady of the lake Each story you were always a part Each destiny, each foretelling, each fate in the years, killing the undeserving, breaking hearts you broke the strongest, crippling the bravest, aiding the weak It was you the sword, of justice, of truth, of greed Those human eyes that saw you, was hurt, you made sure that none could speak of what horror you really caused, the pain of which you seek you were forged, hot fire, deep water, and cold steel created to help us understand, how it could cut both ways those who have seen, your fire haven’t lived, to feel betrayal , hurt, understanding, you are, an aid to see through the haze A tool, a soul, neither for good, nor bad but what the beholder uses you for Whether for greatness, helping, or just remembrance in coming days each shield of life, who carried you through to the distant shore Surprisingly enough, your protector always died, while you survived unworthy of praise To be found again, by an unknowing victim, possessed by your fire Who believed, whispered by your shadow, thinking they are in the right you raise their hopes; uplift their dreams, all the while carrying them higher into a world that they do not belong, farther they go, they lose sight of life. This time though you have met your match Finally you will not rise above me, I am the one who you will not defeat My heart is strong, promises are true , my will can forever last While others back off, I stand my ground, not planning to flee in retreat All others you have run down, were human blood, same Not me I am of a different make I am, wild no one you can tame Coming from a different world, another fate I fight you back; I will stay out of your grasp not willing to be taken Under your enchanted appeal You forget I may seem what I’m not; I am of a stronger people, not forsaken You have captured others souls, from me you can’t conceal What you are doing, all you are after, Excalibur, this name, sends chills Among the thoughts of many, who truly know, even forged in good stead You are coming from two sides, diverging apart, trapped by your own kills People who you ruined, when you became what you were made to dread You were not supposed to be a tool for the haunted minds, but for the wise so as that, people had a weapon, to keep darkness from setting in, even as their lands were held by others meaning harm, it was you who cut back the guise Sooner or later, a meaning of hate, you became, reign of darkness bout to begin till you were found once more, awakened your true mission which was not to kill and destroy but to help others be strong to understand what in their hand they held and make a decision that using Excalibur for hate, meaning to kill, not right but wrong. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, I’m not usually into this kind of poem, no offence… So I won’t even try to criticize anything in it, I wanted to say that I thought you did a great job on this poem though! And like I said, I’m not usually interested in something like this, I get bored easily with it, but on this one it held my attention all the way through, it was such an interesting read! I can’t wait to see more like this one, I just hope they’re at least half as good as yours are… You have an amazing skill for fascinating your readers, I hope you continue writing/posting online, I know I’ve come to enjoy reading your poems! Keep up the good writes, I look forward to reading more soon  @-->--- |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
wow. this was amazingly well.... amazing. It was a gradual build up for me. You kept me on the edge of my seat wondering what choice of words you put together next. I liked this very much.. Keep it up.. you are a talented writer. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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